Talk:Game Workers Unite/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: The Rambling Man (talk · contribs) 13:08, 14 April 2020 (UTC)

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That's it for a quick first pass. On hold. The Rambling Man (Stay indoors, stay safe!!!!) 16:39, 14 April 2020 (UTC)
 * " Game Developers' Conference" no apostrophe according to our article.
 * " Its British chapter " lost the subject in the preceding sentence.
 * "within Independent " within the Independent...
 * "end unfair overtime" isn't "unfair" a point of view?
 * " tech industries " etc technology (encyclopedia).
 * Link Discord/Facebook first time.
 * "Their activists... ", "Their goal..." I thought in USEng there was quite a strict adherence to singular here, after all the organization known as "Game Workers Unite" is a singular entity, right?
 * Generally, yes, but my understanding is that it's fine when emphasizing the group as individuals, e.g., "their activists" makes them sound like mercenaries when the collective is really just composed of individuals czar  04:00, 15 April 2020 (UTC)
 * "esports" link. To some this just looks like a typo.
 * I'd argue that it looks like a typo either way :) (I opposed that move) czar  04:00, 15 April 2020 (UTC)
 * Should "game developers" be "game developers'"?
 * "a private game developers Facebook Group"? Nope, I think that's fine. czar  04:00, 15 April 2020 (UTC)
 * " at the Game Developers' Conference " again, ironically, no apostrophe here apparently.
 * "The results were a turning point ..." according to whom?
 * In the source: "GDC 2018 marks a significant turning point for the industry undercurrent of pro-union sentiment." I don't think this necessitates attribution or is controversial and the sentence has a direct citation czar  04:00, 15 April 2020 (UTC)
 * "founded[4] and" move that more elegantly, and do we not know exactly when?
 * Not that I've seen in print. Probably because it's a collective and not (to my knowledge) formally incorporated? Stylistically, I prefer to keep the footnote as close to the cited text to preserve text–source integrity. czar  04:00, 15 April 2020 (UTC)
 * "AFL–CIO" en-dash.
 * "based on his staff and fan supporters" based on his staff what?
 * What about Game Workers Unite Ireland?
 * I haven't seen any news coverage about this branch, so it appears minor at the moment. After digging, I found this article but don't see anything worth importing. czar  04:00, 15 April 2020 (UTC)
 * , thanks for the review! I've responded above to anything I haven't addressed directly in prose. czar  04:00, 15 April 2020 (UTC)
 * No worries, happy with this so promoting. The Rambling Man (Stay indoors, stay safe!!!!) 17:00, 15 April 2020 (UTC)