Talk:Garfunkel and Oates/GA2

GA Review
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Reviewer: K. Peake (talk · contribs) 06:38, 7 July 2022 (UTC)

I will review this today --K. Peake 06:38, 7 July 2022 (UTC)

Infobox and lead

 * Infobox looks good!
 * Pipe comedy folk to Comedy rock
 * Merge the first para with the second one per the overly short length
 * "met at an improv show" → "met during an improv show" to avoid overusage of at
 * "several of which became popular on" → "becoming popular through" per the body
 * "Their debut studio album," → "Garfunkel and Oates' debut studio album,"
 * In the third para, add a mention of the duo's first tour at the start before the TV series
 * Mention that the nomination was at the 68th Primetime Emmy Awards with the wikilink
 * Wikilink children's TV series and add a comma afterwards

2007–2010: Formation and YouTube

 * Img looks good!
 * Add after the music camp part that they were unaware of each other at the time
 * Lindhome's flute part is not sourced nor is Micucci being four years old
 * Both are taken from their American Songwriter interview:  ben ǝʇᴉɯ  15:06, 7 July 2022 (UTC)
 * Oh, ok; I didn't realize since that ref is not invoked here. --K. Peake 07:15, 8 July 2022 (UTC)


 * "where they were both" → "where the two were both"
 * "They soon became" → "Lindhome and Micucci soon became"
 * "The duo was formed" → "Garfunkel and Oates was formed"
 * Add the release year of Imaginary Larry in brackets
 * "during the 2007–2008 Writers Guild of America strike," → "during the 2007–08 Writers Guild of America strike," with the wikilink
 * "posted two videos of the duo performing their songs to" → "posted a videos of the duo performing to" per the source
 * "and they soon appeared on" → "which soon appeared on"
 * "the duo earned a" → "Garfunkel and Oates earned a"
 * Pipe Culdesac to Culdesac (mixtape)

2011–2013: All Over Your Face, Slippery When Moist, and TV series

 * Wikilink music video
 * "They released a" → "Garfunkel and Oates released a"
 * "In 2012," → "The following year,"
 * "They released their song" → "The duo released their song"
 * "they released the song" → "Garfunkel and Oates released the song"
 * "In September 2013, IFC green-lit" → "In September 2014, IFC approved" with the pipe
 * The Los Angeles comedy scene part does not appear to be sourced
 * I believe that that was what the A.V. Club article was meant to be a source for, my mistake. ben ǝʇᴉɯ  22:46, 7 July 2022 (UTC)

2015–present: Secretions and Trying to Be Special

 * Remove comma after third studio album
 * Pipe "The Romance Renaissance" to The Big Bang Theory (season 7)
 * "they released a Vimeo comedy special," → "Garfunkel and Oates released a Vimeo comedy special titled"
 * "the duo appeared on" → "Garfunkel and Oates appeared on"
 * Add the release year of "Everything Is Awesome" in brackets
 * That feels redundant, only because the sentence already reads,  ben ǝʇᴉɯ  22:46, 7 July 2022 (UTC)


 * "and chose the duo to" → "and chose them to"
 * "written by the duo." → "written by Garfunkel and Oates."
 * Remove commas around Kimberly
 * "write all lyrics." → "write all the lyrics." but merge this with the above para, as the contribution will have happened eventually

Artistry and public image

 * [38][25] should be solely at the end of the sentence
 * "Their music has frequently" → "The work has frequently" to be less repetitive
 * ""childlike" melodies and "sweet"" → ""childlike" melodies, and "sweet""
 * Since there are only two things being listed (the melodies and the vocals), wouldn't a comma be unnecessary? ben ǝʇᴉɯ  22:46, 7 July 2022 (UTC)
 * That is correct; my bad for thinking cutesy was a separate point! --K. Peake 07:15, 8 July 2022 (UTC)


 * What is the usage of The A.V. Club ref in the above sentence?
 * Moved it to where it belonged. ben ǝʇᴉɯ  22:46, 7 July 2022 (UTC)


 * "dirty-mouth act."" → "dirty-mouth act"." per MOS:QUOTE
 * "to stay afloat."" → "to stay afloat"."
 * "compared the tone of their songs to" → "compared the tone of their music to"
 * Pipe Vulture to Vulture.com per MOS:LINK2SECT
 * "wrote that their songs" → "wrote that the songs"

Studio albums

 * Pipe CD to Compact disc
 * Pipe US Heat. to Top Heatseekers per MOS:LINK2SECT

EPs

 * Good

Guest appearances
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 * Why are there no sources here?

Final comments and verdict

 * until all of the issues are fixed, after this quick review! --K. Peake 08:55, 7 July 2022 (UTC)
 * I think I made all of the necessary changes, save for a few that I addressed above. If I missed anything important (or anything at all), let me know. Thank you so much for the speedy review! ben ǝʇᴉɯ  22:46, 7 July 2022 (UTC)
 * Nice work but you missed the HuffPost fix, also shouldn't the American Songwriter ref be invoked again after the instrumentation sentence from their younger years since it is not invoked until the end of the para later on than [2]? --K. Peake 07:15, 8 July 2022 (UTC)
 * ✅. ben ǝʇᴉɯ  05:55, 9 July 2022 (UTC)
 * ✅ now, impressive work and you had a much more responsive reviewer than last time! --K. Peake 09:19, 9 July 2022 (UTC)