Talk:Gender inequality in Tonga

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The article looks good. I went ahead and made a lot of the edits in the document, but here are a few suggestions for revision.
 * 1) I would reword the last sentence in the opening paragraph. As it stands, it seems to make the argument that the examination you’re going to pursue is the only way to guide policies in other countries. That may be true, but probably isn’t necessary to say.
 * 2) I would also reword the first sentence in the last paragraph of “Gender Norms”. I’m not sure it says what you want it to.
 * 3) The first sentence of the last paragraph in "Policies to Promote Gender Equality” doesn’t make sense to me.

Nelson Gladwell (talk) 03:12, 18 April 2013 (UTC)

Thanks for looking over my article. I appreciate the suggestions. It’s always nice to have someone read over your work to pull out things that could be improved.SioneF (talk) 04:37, 20 April 2013 (UTC)

Review
The article was very informative. I have a few brief suggestions:

“Women have equal access to health care,[2] and the life expectancy rate is 69 for women. [3]” I would suggest providing the life expectancy for Tongan men here. It gives us a point of reference.

“Gender Norms” section, paragraph 2: Husbands have a higher rank than their wives, but sisters hold rank over their brothers. When does this change occur? Is it at a certain age that women are deemed inferior to their male counterparts? Or when they are married?

“In 2010, men working in agriculture or fisheries earned about $5 pa'anga per hour, while women working in handicrafts and service industries made about $2 per hour. [2]”  Tongan currency or US dollars? Make sure it matches.

Mtdillman (talk) 02:42, 20 April 2013 (UTC)

Thanks for looking over my article. One of my concerns was the fact that being Tongan, I would take for granted some information and not explain it clearly enough for someone not familiar with Tongan culture to understand. I appreciate your feedback in how I can explain cultural things better to improve the clarity of my article. SioneF (talk) 04:37, 20 April 2013 (UTC)

Feedback
This is a very informative article. It covers the basic issues of concern in understanding gender inequality in Tonga. You do need to add year to sentences that report statistics. The GII section is good as a general overview (and your use of the 2013 HDR is commendable!). If possible, however, could you discuss education, health, and political participation in greater depth (have separate sections for each, at the same level as "Legal Framework")? For this to happen, you would need to locate and discuss some more statistics.BerikG (talk) 21:47, 25 April 2013 (UTC)
 * More feedback: 1) fahu: it would be good to add more info on what higher status brings to the older sister. (I agree with the clarification question above.) Do they have greater decision making power? If so, over what kinds of matters? 2) GII section: It would be good to add how Tonga compares to the Medium Human Development group averages (stats are in a row at the end of Table 4). A small correction: on GII there are *147* countries. 3) Is domestic violence an issue on the public policy radar in Tonga? 4) economic activities and participation section could use more elaboration. I realize you may be short on sources, but some of the info you have needs elaboration (e.g. Not clear where 46% of income comes from and what year this stat is for; business-land ownership connection; the growth in the labor force due to women? are women migrating for work too? If so, where and what kind of work? Make sure you connect to our migration readings and cite them, if relevant!). BerikG (talk) 03:18, 26 April 2013 (UTC)

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