Talk:Geoff Bent/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Ixtal (talk · contribs) 11:03, 5 April 2023 (UTC)

I'll be reviewing this over the next few days.

Early life

 * I wonder if Bent began as a forward, playing at inside left, [...] would work better with the wikilink on "inside left", i.e. Bent began as a forward, playing at inside left, [...]. — Ixtal ( T / C ) &#8258; Non nobis solum. 15:25, 10 April 2023 (UTC)
 * I've added that link, but left the link on forward to the page as a whole. Harrias  (he/him) • talk 15:44, 10 April 2023 (UTC)

Manchester United

 * I don't understand what the distinction is between trialist and amateur, or how one can join a professional club as an amateur. — Ixtal ( T / C ) &#8258; Non nobis solum. 15:25, 10 April 2023 (UTC)
 * Okay, so I don't have a reference to hand for this, but amateurism stuck around in UK sport into the 1960s. As I understand, and I don't recall the details specifically, but a trialist was essentially an unpaid apprentice, who earned "boot money" ie. they did jobs such as cleaning the boots for senior players to earn some money. An amateur was a player with a second job, and the FA limited the amount they could be paid to a set amount, lower than a professional. A professional, was, well, professional! I'm planning to take this onto FA, so I assume from your uncertainty, you think it would be worth finding a source so that I can add a note explaining this? Harrias  (he/him) • talk 15:44, 10 April 2023 (UTC)
 * , yes I do think it is worth finding a source so that it can be explained. If you do find the source, I'd appreciate if you could add it to Amateur_sports as well as the paragraph describing that phenomenon currently has a cn tag. — Ixtal ( T / C ) &#8258; Non nobis solum. 16:12, 10 April 2023 (UTC)
 * Byrne praised Bent, describing him as a "valuable prospect" who makes Byrne "strive to keep my position". This double repetition of Byrne's name reads awkwardly. — Ixtal ( T / C ) &#8258; Non nobis solum. 15:25, 10 April 2023 (UTC)
 * Fair. Rewritten this sentence, let me know how it is now. Harrias  (he/him) • talk 15:44, 10 April 2023 (UTC)

Legacy

 * The neglected state of his grave has been a regular press story; in 1988 the Manchester Evening News ran a story, in which Bent's widow, Marion, said she could not afford to maintain the grave. I suggest you find a way to simplify or divide this sentence, as the semicolon followed by three commas makes it hard to read. — Ixtal ( T / C ) &#8258; Non nobis solum. 15:25, 10 April 2023 (UTC)
 * Removed her name; it is mentioned earlier anyway. Harrias  (he/him) • talk 15:44, 10 April 2023 (UTC)

Misc. Comments

 * I'll do a quick source review plus copyvio check once my comments above are addressed, but so far it looks like a fantastic article. Good work, . — Ixtal ( T / C ) &#8258; Non nobis solum. 15:25, 10 April 2023 (UTC)
 * Thanks for the review. Responded to each point above. Harrias  (he/him) • talk 15:44, 10 April 2023 (UTC)
 * Just wanted to give you a gentle nudge on this one. Harrias  (he/him) • talk 19:51, 15 April 2023 (UTC)
 * Thanks for the nudge, . Passed Copyvio detector so I'm passing the review. Congratulations! — Ixtal ( T / C ) &#8258; Non nobis solum. 09:57, 16 April 2023 (UTC)