Talk:George Campbell (American football)/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Seabuckthorn (talk · contribs) 02:03, 2 January 2014 (UTC)

Nominator: TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD)

Hi! I'll be reviewing this article for GA status, and should have my full review up shortly. -- Seabuckthorn   ♥  02:03, 2 January 2014 (UTC)

GA review – see WP:WIAGA for criteria


 * 1) Is it reasonably well written?
 * A. Prose is "clear and concise", without copyvios, or spelling and grammar errors:
 * Pass
 * B. MoS compliance for lead, layout, words to watch, fiction, and lists:
 * See below for issues with lead, layout & lists. ✅


 * 1) Is it factually accurate and verifiable?
 * A. Has an appropriate reference section:
 * Pass
 * B. Citation to reliable sources where necessary:
 * Pass
 * C. No original research:
 * Pass
 * 1) Is it broad in its coverage?
 * A. Major aspects:
 * Pass
 * B. Focused:
 * Pass
 * 1) Is it neutral?
 * Fair representation without bias:
 * Pass
 * 1) Is it stable?
 * No edit wars, etc:
 * Pass
 * 1) Does it contain images to illustrate the topic?
 * A. Images are tagged with their copyright status, and valid fair use rationales are provided for non-free content:
 * Pass
 * B. Images are provided if possible and are relevant to the topic, and have suitable captions:
 * Pass
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass or Fail:
 * On hold for the 1b issues. ✅ Pass

WP:LEAD: ✅


 * Fix First sentence (WP:LEADSENTENCE).
 * Definition and notability should be in the first sentence (WP:BETTER). In order to provide a clearer and more informative introduction to the nonspecialist reader, I recommend the following revision :
 * George Campbell IV is an American football player who plays at positions of safety, defensive end and wide receiver and who is rated as the second best player by ESPN and as the second best wide receiver by Scout.com in the national high school class of 2015. He is a junior at East Lake High School during the 2013-14 school year and has committed to play for Michigan Wolverines football. He has also accepted an invitation to participate in the 2015 Under Armour All-America Game.
 * Done.--TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 06:41, 4 January 2014 (UTC)
 * Fix Length (WP:LEADLENGTH). Lead can be expanded to reflect more information detailed in the body.

WP:LAYOUT: ✅


 * Fix Headings and sections (MOS:BODY).
 * Use a different heading for section Early life. This section hardly has anything before 2011 so the early is not appropriate.
 * Changed to "High school"--TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 06:44, 4 January 2014 (UTC)
 * Very short or very long sections and subsections in an article look cluttered and inhibit the flow of the prose. I recommend breaking up text in the Early life section and organizing content into separate sections.
 * It currently has one paragraph for each year of high school. I have made each paragraph a section.--TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 06:47, 4 January 2014 (UTC)
 * Fix section Personal (MOS:PARAGRAPHS). The number of single-sentence paragraphs should be minimized. Short paragraphs and single sentences generally do not warrant their own subheading. Either this section should be merged into the previous section, or else more information on the personal life should be added.
 * Now, it is at the beginning of the High school section. I believe it should be reverted back to the early life name with this change.--TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 06:51, 4 January 2014 (UTC)
 * It's your call. But really, I believe the article looks clear and good now. -- Seabuckthorn   ♥  12:36, 4 January 2014 (UTC)

WP:EMBED:


 * Embedded lists should be used only when appropriate; sometimes the information in a list is better presented as prose paragraphs. Tables are a complex form of list. (MOS:TABLES). I recommend removing the table as most of the information is already covered in the lead and infobox.
 * This table is a standard element of an article for a football or basketball bio. I probably have included them in 50 prior WP:GAs.--TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 06:52, 4 January 2014 (UTC)
 * OK. For the sake of closure, I'm marking it as 'not done'. -- Seabuckthorn   ♥  12:36, 4 January 2014 (UTC)

I'm putting the article on hold. All the best! -- Seabuckthorn   ♥  10:07, 3 January 2014 (UTC)

OK, everything looks good now. Passing the article to GA status. -- Seabuckthorn   ♥  12:36, 4 January 2014 (UTC)