Talk:George Charles Beckley/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Iazyges (talk · contribs) 00:48, 23 July 2018 (UTC)

Will start soon. Iazyges  Consermonor   Opus meum  00:48, 23 July 2018 (UTC)

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Prose Suggestions
Please note that all of these are suggestions, and can be implemented or ignored at your discretion.
 * He sold his ship to local chiefs and took up residence in the kingdom was this one chief or multiple?
 * Not specified but it is plural chiefs. KAVEBEAR (talk) 16:32, 23 July 2018 (UTC)


 * Beckley was made a high chief by Kamehameha I so that he might, with "impunity enter the sacred precincts of the grass house and present the royal infant with a roll of China silk, after which he went outside and fired a salute of thirteen guns in her honor." this seems to imply that he had to be a high chief to enter the grass house; else it might mean he needed to be high chief to fire the gun, may want to specify that only high chiefs or above were allowed to enter/fire the guns.
 * Changed it to make more sense. KAVEBEAR (talk) 16:32, 23 July 2018 (UTC)


 * Beckley implemented the tradition of wearing Western uniforms, gaining the name "Humehume" (cover up) by the Hawaiians. Previously the native soldiers only wore the traditional malo (loincloths) suggest:
 * Beckley implemented the tradition of wearing Western uniforms, gaining the name "Humehume" (cover up) by the Hawaiians, who had previously worn only the traditional malo (loincloths).
 * This might be good as is. KAVEBEAR (talk) 16:33, 23 July 2018 (UTC)
 * That is all my suggestions, passing now. Iazyges   Consermonor   Opus meum  10:46, 23 July 2018 (UTC)