Talk:George Edward Hilt/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Eddie891 (talk · contribs) 16:28, 1 March 2021 (UTC)

Can attend to shortly Eddie891 Talk Work 16:28, 1 March 2021 (UTC)
 * "He landed at Omaha Beach one day after D-Day" think it's worth specifying what day that is
 * ✅ --Doug Coldwell (talk) 10:49, 3 March 2021 (UTC)


 * There seem to be some gaps. Any idea what he did between 1916 and 1943, for instance?
 * ✅ - copy edited as worked in their family hardware business in Muskegon when able as young men --Doug Coldwell (talk) 11:06, 3 March 2021 (UTC)


 * What makes LifeStoryNet a reliable source?
 * ✅ - it's the same obituary published in Muskegon Chronicle newspaper on Oct. 7, 2012.


 * "Hilt and his younger brother, Jack, worked in their family hardware business in Muskegon"
 * ✅ - copy edited as worked in their family hardware business in Muskegon when able as young men --Doug Coldwell (talk) 11:47, 3 March 2021 (UTC)


 * Standardize between 'Quality Farm & Fleet" and 'Quality Farm and Fleet'
 * ✅ --Doug Coldwell (talk) 11:55, 3 March 2021 (UTC)


 * sizes need to be converted
 * ✅ --Doug Coldwell (talk) 12:34, 3 March 2021 (UTC)


 * "Hilt and his brother decided to move their business" any idea when?
 * ✅ - Sources only say The Hilts later moved their business about 30 miles to the northwest, to Norton Shores...--Doug Coldwell (talk) 12:56, 3 March 2021 (UTC)


 * "They retired in 1986" who is 'they'? The employees in the ownership plan?
 * ✅ - copy edited to Hilt and his younger brother Jack retired in 1986. --Doug Coldwell (talk) 13:07, 3 March 2021 (UTC)


 * What was the "Community Foundation for Muskegon County" or the "Hilt Foundation"? What did they do?
 * ✅ copy edited to Hilt Foundation, a philanthropy organization which he formed in 1986. --Doug Coldwell (talk) 13:52, 3 March 2021 (UTC)


 * What was the "Hilt Building"?
 * ✅ - copy edited to Hilt Building that was converted to a cultural center --Doug Coldwell (talk) 13:26, 3 March 2021 (UTC)


 * "Hilt remembers the family cottage that used to be on the property where the family grew up." perhaps just "the property used to include a family cottage"? Why does it matter whether hilt remembers it?
 * ✅ copy edited to The property used to include a family cottage where he grew up. --Doug Coldwell (talk) 16:50, 3 March 2021 (UTC)


 * Is there any more detail about him-- perhaps on his philanthropy?
 * ✅ --Doug Coldwell (talk) 19:56, 3 March 2021 (UTC)


 * I've made a lot of copy edits directly instead of suggesting them here
 * ✅ --Doug Coldwell (talk) 19:56, 3 March 2021 (UTC)


 * Images seem appropriately licenced.
 * ✅ --Doug Coldwell (talk) 19:56, 3 March 2021 (UTC)


 * Earwigs suggests no copyvio
 * ✅ --Doug Coldwell (talk) 19:56, 3 March 2021 (UTC)


 * Not seeing which siblings were older/younger in the cited sources
 * ✅ copy edited to c/e to He had a sister, Marguerite and five brothers.''--Doug Coldwell (talk) 19:56, 3 March 2021 (UTC)


 * cited source doesn't seem to support "whom he married May 16, 1939, when he was 23 years and she was 22 years old. Martha died March 30, 1996, at age of 79."
 * ✅ copy edited accordingly. --Doug Coldwell (talk) 21:34, 3 March 2021 (UTC)


 * other spot checked sources line up.
 * ✅ --Doug Coldwell (talk) 19:56, 3 March 2021 (UTC)


 * Holding Eddie891 Talk Work 02:39, 3 March 2021 (UTC)
 * Thanks for review. Will start working on issues.--Doug Coldwell (talk) 10:28, 3 March 2021 (UTC)
 * All issues have been addressed. Can you take another look. Thanks. --Doug Coldwell (talk) 21:34, 3 March 2021 (UTC)