Talk:George Edwards (jockey)

On the legacy of George Edwards
Hi folks! If anyone stumbles upon this, thank you for your time. I got to this stub from hitting 'Random Article' and changed the wording up a little bit -- though one thing still bothers me. The original line was something like, 'He died penniless in a Newmarket Workhouse in 1851.', which I found to be distasteful both because I think it was insulting, and because it was hardly a paraphrase from the second reference.

Should we try to document this stranger's legacy more respectably? I briefly considered removing the whole poor thing altogether (bad idea), or mentioning his economic status not in the concluding line, but in the paragraph before. How should this be handled? I'll probably come back to this in the near future to edit it with a fresh perspective, but I'm at this time leaning towards separating the penniless bit from the conclusion so it reads something like "...(current end of last body paragraph). At the end of his life, Edwards was impoverished. (--> indent, conclusion) George Edwards died in a Newmarket workhouse in 1851."

Take care and be kind :))

Spacepillow (talk) 05:11, 19 October 2020 (UTC)