Talk:George Floyd (American football)/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: MWright96 (talk · contribs) 19:53, 9 July 2021 (UTC)

Shall review for the July 2021 GAN Backlog Drive MWright96 (talk) 19:53, 9 July 2021 (UTC)
 * 1) It is reasonably well written.
 * a (prose): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
 * 1) It is factually accurate and verifiable.
 * a (reference section): b (citations to reliable sources):  c (OR):
 * 1) It is broad in its coverage.
 * a (major aspects): b (focused):
 * 1) It follows the neutral point of view policy.
 * Fair representation without bias:
 * 1) It is stable.
 * No edit wars, etc.:
 * 1) It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
 * a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass/Fail:
 * 1) It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
 * a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass/Fail:
 * Pass/Fail:

Lead

 * "Floyd appeared in ten games during the Jets' 1982 season, including three playoff games, and eight in their 1984 season, with two games started." - repetition of "games"
 * Cut last instance. Therapyisgood (talk) 17:36, 10 July 2021 (UTC)
 * "After a knee injury in the 1985 NFL preseason, Floyd retired." - possibly better Floyd retired after sustaining a knee injury in the 1985 NFL preseason.
 * Changed. Therapyisgood (talk) 17:36, 10 July 2021 (UTC)
 * "In 1999, he was inducted into the College Football Hall of Fame; in 2007, he was inducted into EKU's Hall of Fame, and, in 2011, he was inducted into Hernando High School's Hall of Fame." - too many uses of the term "he was inducted into the"; try something different that doesn't lose meaning if possible
 * Rewrote. Therapyisgood (talk) 17:36, 10 July 2021 (UTC)

Early life

 * Wikilink Hernando High School and college football
 * Linked. Therapyisgood (talk) 17:39, 10 July 2021 (UTC)
 * "He tied for the team lead with three interceptions and finished with 84 tackles, third-most on the team," - repetition of "team"
 * Changed. Therapyisgood (talk) 17:41, 10 July 2021 (UTC)

Collegiate career

 * "and lead the conference with thirteen punt returns and seven interceptions." - typo; should be led
 * Changed this and another instance. Therapyisgood (talk) 18:00, 10 July 2021 (UTC)
 * "In Floyd's sophomore year, he had a three-interception game against Austin Peay in a 35–10 EKU victory in September, and, in a game against Jackson State in November," - repetition of "game"
 * Changed. Therapyisgood (talk) 18:00, 10 July 2021 (UTC)
 * "Floyd won OVC DPOW for his performance in an October 24th game" - October 24 per MOS:DATESNO
 * Changed. Therapyisgood (talk) 18:00, 10 July 2021 (UTC)
 * "Floyd returned seventeen punts for 142 yards." - should be 17 per MOS:NUMBERS
 * Changed. Therapyisgood (talk) 18:00, 10 July 2021 (UTC)
 * "returned thirty-six punts for 314 yards and a touchdown." - same issue as above
 * Changed. Therapyisgood (talk) 18:00, 10 July 2021 (UTC)
 * "After the season, he made the GC all-conference team and the TTT all-area team." - repetition of "team"
 * Changed. Therapyisgood (talk) 18:00, 10 July 2021 (UTC)
 * "In 1999, Floyd was inducted into the College Football Hall of Fame, and, in 2007, he was inducted into EKU's Hall of Fame." - repetition of the phrase "was inducted into"
 * Changed. Therapyisgood (talk) 18:09, 10 July 2021 (UTC)

Professional career

 * Each of the three mentions of New York Daily News need to be fully italized
 * I'm following our article on New York Daily News on italicization. Therapyisgood (talk) 18:07, 10 July 2021 (UTC)
 * Wikilink the term kickoff returner to the correct article
 * Linked. Therapyisgood (talk) 18:19, 10 July 2021 (UTC)
 * "Floyd saw "limited action"" - according to whom?
 * Added. Therapyisgood (talk) 18:19, 10 July 2021 (UTC)
 * " Floyd recovered a fumble and made a few "All-Pro hits"" - same issue as above
 * There is no author listed so I just say according to an article in the TTT. Therapyisgood (talk) 18:19, 10 July 2021 (UTC)

Personal life

 * "As a junior in high school, Floyd wanted to join the Army." - perhaps add why he did not join the army
 * Source doesn't say, unfortunately. Therapyisgood (talk) 18:04, 10 July 2021 (UTC)
 * "He married Cheryl Johnson in March 1983." - who is Cheryl Johnson?
 * His wife, presumably. Therapyisgood (talk) 18:04, 10 July 2021 (UTC)
 * I will take that there no further information available on Johnson MWright96 (talk) 11:49, 11 July 2021 (UTC)