Talk:George Kaiserling/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: The Rambling Man (talk · contribs) 13:52, 6 September 2021 (UTC)

Comments That's it for now. The Rambling Man (Keep wearing the mask...) 18:54, 6 September 2021 (UTC)
 * "Kaiserling played..." -> "he played"
 * "he contracted tuberculosis in 1917" the following year.
 * "was married. No marriage" -> "married, however no marriage certificate has been discovered."
 * "1910–13" etc etc year range needs all four digits, 1910–1913.
 * "5.8 years" this is grim, perhaps, "almost six years"?
 * I like 5.8 because it's more specific, but I changed to say his age was 5.8 years below, not that he himself was 5.8 years younger. Hope this is better. Sanfranciscogiants17 (talk) 02:57, 7 September 2021 (UTC)
 * "12–12 record in 30 games" does that mean he didn't pitch in the other six games?
 * In baseball, pitching in a game does not automatically guarantee a decision. Your team needs to be winning while you're in it and remain ahead to qualify for the win; vice versa for a loss. If the game is tied when you are taken out, or your team loses the lead or takes the lead after you leave, that game will not count in your record, regardless of the result. This, however, should be covered by the win-loss record article, which is linked. Sanfranciscogiants17 (talk) 03:00, 7 September 2021 (UTC)
 * "Illinois–Missouri League " all these need en-dashes, not hyphens.
 * "for roster spots" how many of those would there be typically?
 * Complicated question because, not only might the total number of roster spots vary depending on the league, but there is no official rule concerning the number of pitchers. The way it's worded now best reflects the info in the source. Sanfranciscogiants17 (talk) 03:03, 7 September 2021 (UTC)
 * Consider translating Kaiser (emperor).
 * Link winning percentage.
 * "the outlaw" come again? needs a tiny explanation.
 * "the pennant race" you link pennant here, so I guess you ought to do same in the lead.
 * "only seventh place in the league" how many were in the league?
 * "The Indianapolis News observed" The does not appear to be part of the formal name of the paper.
 * "80–72–3," is the third number ties? It's not obvious to non-baseball experts, perhaps use a pop-up text call-out here?
 * It is indeed ties. You never see them these days, but this was more common back before ballparks had lights installed, when games might end because it was too dark to play. Sanfranciscogiants17 (talk) 03:11, 7 September 2021 (UTC)
 * "bid on, but no one bidded on" bidded?? And this is a bit repetitive/clunky for me.
 * "Strongly and powerfully" aren't these syonymous?
 * You ought to point that out to the person who wrote the SABR article! Removed powerfully. Sanfranciscogiants17 (talk) 03:13, 7 September 2021 (UTC)
 * "The South Bend Tribune" again, no "The" apparently in the formal title.
 * Why wasn't Great Bend Millers linked?
 * It was a redlink back when I was writing the article, but now, it has an article! Linked it! Sanfranciscogiants17 (talk) 03:15, 7 September 2021 (UTC)