Talk:George Kistiakowsky/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Peacemaker67 (talk · contribs) 10:26, 24 May 2013 (UTC)

I'll get started on this shortly. Peacemaker67 (send... over) 10:26, 24 May 2013 (UTC) Comments That's it, placing on hold for seven days for the above to be addressed. Peacemaker67 (send... over) 12:00, 24 May 2013 (UTC)
 * the article links to several dab pages
 * ✅ Done. Hawkeye7 (talk) 20:30, 24 May 2013 (UTC)
 * alt text needed on some images (not a GA requirement) per
 * ✅ Done. Hawkeye7 (talk) 20:30, 24 May 2013 (UTC)
 * all other toolbox checks are green. (no action required)
 * development of shaped charges
 * ✅ Done. Hawkeye7 (talk) 20:30, 24 May 2013 (UTC)
 * Hugh Stott Taylor, needs to lose the space before the comma
 * ✅ Done. Hawkeye7 (talk) 20:30, 24 May 2013 (UTC)
 * and game gave him
 * ✅ Done. Hawkeye7 (talk) 20:30, 24 May 2013 (UTC)
 * He became an associate professor twice, might be worth clarifying the second time was at Harvard
 * ✅ Done. Hawkeye7 (talk) 20:30, 24 May 2013 (UTC)
 * tapped - suggest a little informal, perhaps "selected" or "recruited"
 * ✅ Done. Hawkeye7 (talk) 20:30, 24 May 2013 (UTC)
 * Spring → spring
 * ✅ Done. Hawkeye7 (talk) 20:30, 24 May 2013 (UTC)
 * was into RDX
 * ✅ Done. Hawkeye7 (talk) 20:30, 24 May 2013 (UTC)
 * "The challenge was to produce an industrial process that could produce it on a large scale", suggest substituting the first "produce" with "develop"
 * ✅ Done. Hawkeye7 (talk) 20:30, 24 May 2013 (UTC)
 * and which was widely used in torpedoes
 * ✅ Ooops. Corrected. Hawkeye7 (talk) 20:30, 24 May 2013 (UTC)
 * calling out that demanded for further investigation
 * ✅ Done. Hawkeye7 (talk) 20:30, 24 May 2013 (UTC)
 * suggest you explain a little more about the Chapman–Jouguet model, perhaps "the Chapman–Jouguet model of detonation velocity"?
 * ✅ Done. Hawkeye7 (talk) 20:30, 24 May 2013 (UTC)
 * The first para of the Manhatten Project subsection starts in 1944 then goes back to 1943. Suggest you put it in chronological order to show how he became involved
 * ✅ Done. Hawkeye7 (talk) 20:30, 24 May 2013 (UTC)
 * "Kistiakowsky watched the as the" not sure if a word is missing or extra
 * ✅ Deleted. Hawkeye7 (talk) 20:30, 24 May 2013 (UTC)
 * He sent Kistiakowsky, in early November 1960, to the SAC Headquarters in Omaha to evaluate the SAC war plans → In early November 1960, he sent Kistiakowsky to the SAC Headquarters in Omaha to evaluate the SAC war plans
 * ✅ Done. Hawkeye7 (talk) 20:30, 24 May 2013 (UTC)
 * The orders gave SAC officers the choice to cooperate with Kistiakowsky, do you mean they had no choice? Unclear.
 * ✅ Done. Hawkeye7 (talk) 20:30, 24 May 2013 (UTC)
 * fn's 13 & 23, pp→p
 * ✅ Done. Hawkeye7 (talk) 20:30, 24 May 2013 (UTC)
 * his name is unnecessarily bolded in the Refs (Dainton)
 * ✅ Done. Hawkeye7 (talk) 20:30, 24 May 2013 (UTC)
 * physics should probably have an initial capital in the infobox
 * ✅ Done. Hawkeye7 (talk) 20:30, 24 May 2013 (UTC)
 * The file File:George Kistiakowsky ID badge.png just needs its PD licence tweaked over at Commons to fix a syntax error
 * ✅ Done. Hawkeye7 (talk) 20:30, 24 May 2013 (UTC)
 * there are three overlinks, Physical chemistry, Manhattan Project and American Chemical Society
 * ✅ Done. Hawkeye7 (talk) 20:30, 24 May 2013 (UTC)
 * All points addressed. Hawkeye7 (talk) 20:30, 24 May 2013 (UTC)
 * Good work, moving to promote. Peacemaker67 (send... over) 01:48, 25 May 2013 (UTC)