Talk:George Livermore/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: The Rambling Man (talk · contribs) 10:32, 30 August 2021 (UTC)

Comments
 * "who had many valuable old books" probably unnecessary.


 * "States. His library included" merge.


 * "included... including" repetitive.


 * spell out Johannes Gutenberg.


 * US not USA in infobox.


 * "Harvard College" link?


 * Cambridgeport (article) or Cambridge (infobox)? Be consistent.


 * "His English ancestor, John Livermore, who emigrated from Ipswich, England to " (heh, I was born there...) + comma after England.
 * ✅ = no wonder your English is so good!


 * "United States. [3]" no space before ref.


 * "public and private elementary" links because they mean different things in different countries.


 * "poet Oliver Wendell Holmes" should there be a Sr there?


 * "in 1827-28, when" en-dash.


 * "some eight miles away" convert.


 * "the later part" curiously I normally say "latter".


 * "visited President" he just visited the US Pres?!


 * "In this business he did a lot of traveling" bit colloquial, could be "He traveled extensively for work." or similar.


 * "1834-35, " en-dash.


 * "He enjoyed books ... He enjoyed books..." repetitive.


 * "States.[10] [11]" no space between refs


 * "the "Christian Examiner"' " italics and not in quotes.


 * "the "Cambridge Chronicle"" is that another publication which should be in italics?


 * "time.[10] He wrote hymns for Sunday school children." can you merge this to reduce repetition.


 * " Cromwell's Soldiers' Pocket Bible" again, check italics.


 * "of Coverdale's Bible" our article is called The Coverdale Bible.


 * Link Vulgate.


 * "given to Queen Elizabeth by" Elizabeth I.


 * "were own by Livermore. He owned a copy " owned by Livermore, but need some reword to avoid the quick repeat.


 * "single leaf on vellum" links?


 * "Historical Research - self published (200 pages)." etc, en-dash, not hyphen, check whole list.


 * "at that time he was elected a member of the Phi Beta Kappa Society." you already said that.

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 * "He was also a member of the American Academy of Arts and Sciences" and that. Suggest you look at consolidating the Societies and Legacy...


 * "It included ancient copies of the rare Bibles" you've already covered this adequately.


 * That's all I have on a first read through. The Rambling Man (Keep wearing the mask...) 14:12, 30 August 2021 (UTC)
 * Thanks for first read through on the review. I will get started on it, right after lunch.--Doug Coldwell (Get vaccinated... ) 15:01, 30 August 2021 (UTC)
 * All issues have been addressed. Can you take another look. Thanks. --19:57, 30 August 2021 (UTC)