Talk:George Sisler/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Ezlev (talk · contribs) 00:51, 3 January 2022 (UTC)

I'll review this article! I've created two subsections below: one for GAProgress as an overview of the review's status and one for specific points to be raised and discussed. I'm looking forward to collaborating with you, !
 * After an initial review, this is looking very good. I'll place it on hold to allow time for changes to be made! See below. ezlev (user/tlk/ctrbs) 01:24, 3 January 2022 (UTC)
 * Nicely done, ! I'm satisfied. Congrats on the GA! ezlev (user/tlk/ctrbs) 20:41, 3 January 2022 (UTC)

Well written
Prose: Overall very good. Sanfranciscogiants17 (talk) 18:38, 3 January 2022 (UTC) MOS:
 * The first sentence of the section .400 hitter and MVP (1920–1922) reads "In 1920, baseballs began to be manufactured with a tighter-wound yarn, and emphasis These changes ushered in the live-ball era, in which many batters began to hit more home runs." Emphasis on what?
 * Next paragraph. "After tying the old record on September 27, Sisler set the new one on a day dedicated to him, in which he was presented with a $1,000 check, a $1,500 silver service, and flowers before the game at Sportsman's Park." Was the day dedicated to him before he set the new record, or retroactively dedicated to him because of the new record?
 * It was kind of a coincidence that that day was dedicated to him, so I clarified.
 * It was kind of a coincidence that that day was dedicated to him, so I clarified.
 * Same paragraph. "Sisler also finished second in the AL in eight offensive categories, including home runs (19, behind Ruth's 54), RBI (122, behind 137), and stolen bases (42, behind Sam Rice's 63)." Who had 137 RBI?
 * Same paragraph. "Despite finishing second to Ruth in home runs, Sisler did not try for them, as he was more concerned with keeping a high batting average." I know what this is meant to say but the wording could be clarified.
 * First paragraph of later life section. "Replacing Honus Wagner in 1938 as the commissioner of the National Baseball Congress, Sisler held the role for many years." How long?
 * Unfortunately, the sources aren't clear on this.
 * In the personal life section, first paragraph, the final two sentences seem like they might fit better in the later life section?
 * First paragraph of later life section. "Replacing Honus Wagner in 1938 as the commissioner of the National Baseball Congress, Sisler held the role for many years." How long?
 * Unfortunately, the sources aren't clear on this.
 * In the personal life section, first paragraph, the final two sentences seem like they might fit better in the later life section?
 * In the personal life section, first paragraph, the final two sentences seem like they might fit better in the later life section?
 * Lede looks good, but do you think it might be good to add a bit more detail about his life after retiring as a player?
 * Considering the way its written, I think it's best left as-is. It's only a brief summary, and Sisler's playing career should be its emphasis. Sanfranciscogiants17 (talk) 18:57, 3 January 2022 (UTC)
 * I wonder if the "Legacy" section should go after "Later life" and "Personal life"?
 * I think it's best where it is. Much of the honors and accolades dealt with in it refer to his playing career, which makes putting it after that section seem more appropriate. Sanfranciscogiants17 (talk) 18:58, 3 January 2022 (UTC)
 * Other required MOS guidelines appear to be met

Verifiable
Reference style: Reliable sources: No original research: Free of copyvio:
 * A-OK
 * They appear to be, yes!
 * Everything looks to be sourced
 * Earwig looks good (mostly flags quotes)

Broad
Addresses main aspects: Stays focused:
 * Definitely looks like it!
 * It does!

Neutral
I tweaked a little bit of wording, but now I believe the article is neutral and reflects the sourcing.

Stable
No substantial changes since September improvements by nominator

Illustrated
By a number of public domain images!