Talk:German aircraft carrier Graf Zeppelin/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Sturmvogel 66 (talk · contribs) 21:40, 5 May 2015 (UTC)

I'll get to this shortly.--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 21:40, 5 May 2015 (UTC)


 * No DABs, external links OK.
 * Images appropriately licensed.
 * Why is displacement in long tons when most everything else is metric?
 * Cause we're post WNT ;) Also, those are the figures Gröner gives them in.
 * The metric conversion is actually provided in the WNT for the Frogs and everyone else who uses that system ;-)
 * If available, actual pressure of her boilers is a good thing supplement "ultra-high pressure".
 * I'll have a look later to see if Gröner has the figure.
 * I'm a bit suspicious of your conversions as they're too rounded. I'd suggest that you either add a "|1" to your templates for all your meter to feet conversions or specify output in feet and inches.
 * Should be fixed now
 * Nmi or km for range figures?
 * Not sure how that got flipped in the infobox...
 * Too many "and"s 12 navalized Junkers Ju 87 "Stuka" dive bombers and thirty Messerschmitt Bf 109 fighters and Fieseler Fi 167 torpedo bombers
 * Nope, it was right - for some reason, Gröner lumps the Bf 109s and Fi 167s into the same figure - Reynolds does, however, so I'll fix it.
 * Missing a comma here: ten 10.5 cm SK C/33 guns—later increased to twelve—twenty-two 3.7 cm SK C/30 guns, and twenty-eight 2 cm guns
 * Hmm, where would you put it? We've exceeded my knowledge of grammar ;)
 * And maybe even my own. Ordinarily you'd have a comma after the 105s, but the emdashes complicate things as I'm not sure that I've ever seen an emdash immediately followed by a comma. Maybe ask Dank?
 * Let's ping him and see if he can lend us a hand:, a little help please?
 * Gotta link for Wotan armor?
 * No, but I have a note on it somewhere - will dig it up.
 * I think that the term is usually "plunging attacks" rather than "vertical", but maybe that's just me.
 * Plunging fire is usually only used for gunfire, not aerial attacks, IMO - will switch it to "aerial" for clarity
 * Make the connection between Graf Zeppelin and Flugzeugträger A on first use. Probably also ought to translate the latter term as well.
 * Done and done.
 * heavier sturdier perhaps a comma? And here as well: According to Soviet records, on 19 March 1947 the Council of Ministers
 * Fixed both
 * 25-26 en dash please
 * Good catch - didn't find that when I was overhauling the text - this is why I prefer to write things from scratch...
 * Convert 5,500 lb and 180 mm.
 * Done
 * Clarify that the facts on her post-war fate given by Western historians were really speculations.
 * A good point.
 * Link warhead.
 * Done.
 * Format for the Whitley articles is inconsistent and incorrect, unless one is a journal issue and the other is the bound volume. If both are the latter then here's an example of the proper formatting:
 * This is going to take some digging - can't remember if I have these or not.
 * The individual issues are kinda scarce and they're most readily available in bound format in libraries.
 * Yeah, that's more than likely where they came from - the trouble is getting the volume, page numbers, etc. I might just have to replace the citations to them. I have a couple of WI articles that might suit the purpose - traveling tonight, so maybe tomorrow morning.
 * I've got these books; the page numbers don't change since the magazines are bound into the book. Part I is in Vol VIII 0-85177-354-0 and part II is Vol. IX 0-87021-984-7. Pub is USNI.--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 17:04, 22 May 2015 (UTC)
 * Thanks, updated the refs.
 * Magazines need ISSN #s and a few books need ISBNs or OCLC #s.
 * Made some progress on this, still one or two outstanding, apart from the Whitleys.
 * Should all be tidied up now. Had to pull the Breyer ref as I couldn't find any details on that book. Parsecboy (talk) 19:18, 27 May 2015 (UTC)
 * - anything left to address here? Parsecboy (talk) 18:00, 30 May 2015 (UTC)
 * - anything else? I'd say that most of ÄDA's comments are beyond the scope of the GA criteria and should probably be addressed before ACR/FAC. Parsecboy (talk) 18:01, 3 June 2015 (UTC)

Comments by ÄDA-DÄP
A few observations:
 * Design
 * The change from metric to imperial needs an explanation for the uninitiated, a few words on Washington, the Anglo-German Naval Treaty and the standard tonnage are in order, I guess.
 * Standard displacement should be linked, but I'm not sure that the rest of your comments are really necessary given the treaty had only a theoretical impact on the ship and her design.--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 21:10, 23 May 2015 (UTC)
 * Graf Zeppelin would be one of the few ships which were actually affected.ÄDA - DÄP VA (talk) 06:11, 31 May 2015 (UTC)


 * Gun calibers are not converted, while everything else is.
 * If it's linked, it doesn't need a conversion.--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 21:10, 23 May 2015 (UTC)
 * Rarely implemented though.ÄDA - DÄP VA (talk) 06:11, 31 May 2015 (UTC)

ÄDA - DÄP VA (talk) 18:59, 23 May 2015 (UTC)
 * Construction and and cancellation
 * After the launch it would seem appropriate to call her Graf Zeppelin, the name change had nothing to do with the conquest of Norway.
 * Good idea.
 * Footnote 14 (Luke, p. 50) does not check out. Weight, date and number of planes differ from the text.
 * Will have to check this - I don't have Luke myself.
 * Dönitz was Commander of Submarines until he replaced Raeder, so if my grammar doesn't fault me, the "former" should be dropped.
 * Works for me.
 * Wouldn't "roadstead" merit a link?
 * Sure
 * A "custodial crew" on a ship is called a skeleton crew, isn't it?
 * Linked
 * Breyer is listed twice, published in 1989 (Schiffer) and in 2004. While the inline citation lacks a year, I guess it's the 2004 publication?
 * Removed the refs to Breyer per above.
 * I have Lake and fixed the cited material. Your definition of Wotan is messed up. Did you mean a breaking strength of x kg/mm2? If so, then converted it as well.--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 00:47, 31 May 2015 (UTC)
 * You're right, I was missing half of the unit. Fixed now. Parsecboy (talk) 22:31, 31 May 2015 (UTC)
 * I am not sure if Luke is to be trusted on these. Marshall (Fn 15) gives much more detail on the raid, which conflicts with Luke's version, though.ÄDA - DÄP VA (talk) 06:11, 31 May 2015 (UTC)
 * Don't have Marshall. Dunno about Parsec, but if you do, then I suggest fixing it yourself.--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 16:09, 31 May 2015 (UTC)
 * All I have are snippets of the German translation on Google Books. Enough to falsify but not exactly RS, sorry. ÄDA - DÄP VA (talk) 18:19, 31 May 2015 (UTC)
 * I don't have either source, the material is from the version before I started working on the article. Nothing I have (Breyer, Schenk, etc.) goes into much detail on the raid. Parsecboy (talk) 22:31, 31 May 2015 (UTC)


 * More construction and cancellation
 * date of order (16 November 1935) is missing
 * Added.
 * the explanation for the 13 month delay is that Gneisenau had to be launched first to make room in slipway 1.
 * Added
 * re launching ceremony it might be worth mentioning that Göring gave the speech and Zeppelin's daughter christened the ship (Israel, 1994, pp.67-9).
 * Added.
 * the launch date is also significant (24th anniversary of the Battle of Falkland Islands).
 * Added
 * Wotan
 * according to Israel 1994, p.76, they used 20mm armor plating "Wotan hart neuer Art" (Wh n/A) on the flight deck, and "St 52 KM" for the rest reaching 45mm of strength near the elevators.

ÄDA - DÄP VA (talk) 06:11, 31 May 2015 (UTC)
 * "Zerreißfestigkeit" would be tear resistance, wouldn't it? Wh had "95 Kpa per mm2"
 * Wotan was developed by Krupp for the German navy.