Talk:Germanus of Winchester/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Ironholds (talk · contribs) 20:57, 22 September 2012 (UTC)

Lead

 * "Journeying to Rome around 957" - "Journeying to Rome in around 957"? I'm not particularly wedded to that wording, but "around date" on its own seems a bit odd to me.
 * Ditto "around 970"
 * "Some accounts have Germanus becoming abbot of Cholsey Abbey in 992, but some " - "some" twice; suggest a reword.

Early career

 * "with Germanus arriving at Fleury after Oswald had been resident at Fleury " - *"with Germanus arriving at Fleury after Oswald had been resident there"

Return to England

 * " investigated monastic regulations and order" - that is, he studied them, or he was tasked with enforcing them?
 * Link Ramsey Abbey
 * " around 970" - same again.
 * "but was removed from office in 975[4]" - add a comma? Footnotes slap-bang in the middle of prose are normally frowned upon :).

Later life

 * Link Eadnoth the Younger
 * "The two abbots themselves carried the remains of the saint and his companions" - "The two abbots carried the remains of the saint and his companions themselves"
 * All else is good :). Ironholds (talk) 20:57, 22 September 2012 (UTC)

Ealdgyth is snowed under with work, so I've taken it upon myself to address the issues you've raised. I trust Ealdgyth won't mind. Malleus Fatuorum 02:27, 23 September 2012 (UTC)
 * Grand; looks good! Passing :). Ironholds (talk) 18:59, 23 September 2012 (UTC)