Talk:Gervase of Bazoches/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Iazyges (talk · contribs) 18:56, 6 April 2020 (UTC)

Will start soon. Iazyges  Consermonor   Opus meum  18:56, 6 April 2020 (UTC)

Criteria
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Prose Suggestions
Please note that all of these are suggestions, and can be implemented or ignored at your discretion.

Lede

 * was Prince of Galilee from 1105 or 1106 until his death suggest was prince of Galilee from 1105/1106 until his death.
 * but moved to the Holy Land, suggest but migrated to the Holy Land,
 * granted him Galilee in 1105 or 1106. suggest appointed him prince of Galilee in 1105/1106 else granted him rule over Galilee in 1105/1106
 * abandon three important towns in exchange for Gervase's release. suggest surrender three important towns in exchange for Gervase's release.

Prince of Galilee

 * Outraged by the king's answer, Toghtekin ordered Gervase be executed in Damascus.[1][8] Toghtekin's soldiers tied Gervase to a tree and shot arrows at him in May. suggest Outraged by the king's answer, Toghtekin ordered Gervase be executed in Damascus in May, ordering that he be tied to a tree and shot with arrows.
 * That is all my suggestions. A nice little article. Passing now. Iazyges   Consermonor   Opus meum  19:17, 6 April 2020 (UTC)

, thank you for your review and for your above suggestion. I modified the text in accordance with them. I slightly modified the one you suggested for the main text. Have a nice day! Borsoka (talk) 06:16, 7 April 2020 (UTC)