Talk:Gethin Jones/Archive: GA review

GA on hold
Leave a note on my talk page when done, please. Cheers, dihydrogen monoxide (H20) 10:02, 29 February 2008 (UTC)
 * Free image!!! (if you can :) )
 * Comment: Couldn't find a free image on Flickr. Any other suggestions?
 * Not any that I can think of... dihydrogen monoxide (H20) 04:14, 2 March 2008 (UTC)
 * The first para of the lead talks about a children's show; the 2nd starts with a Rugby mention. Seems odd...expand the first, I'd say. Talk more about what ubernotable stuff he's done, if any.
 * Comment: Hmmm, a bit tricky. The notable material is already in the second paragraph of the lead. I could leave out any mention of Jones's involvement with rugby union, but it seems a shame to do this since it appears to have been an important part of his life. Does this really need changing?
 * It doesn't...I wouldn't object to a mention of, like, the 2nd most notable thing, but it's OK I guess. dihydrogen monoxide (H20) 04:14, 2 March 2008 (UTC)
 * "He has an older sister named Mereid[1]" - you need some punctuation under the ref; perhaps move to end of sentence
 * "flying with the Red Arrows[6]" - again
 * "30-mile (48 km) Yomp[10]" - move it to the end of the sentence
 * "they first met in 2005[1]" - again
 * Comment: I don't think these need changing. While footnote numbers should generally be placed at the ends of sentences, if the facts that are referenced are in the middle of the sentence, then it's acceptable to have the footnote number in the same place. For instance, the fact that Jones has an older sister named Mereid is referenced by footnote [1], but that source does not mention his nephew Albie, so I feel that placing the footnote number at the end of the sentence would be misleading. "Wikipedia:Citing sources" states: "Some material must be referenced mid-sentence, but footnotes are usually placed at the end of a sentence or paragraph." (Emphasis added.) I've found a reference for the name of his nephew, so I've added that.
 * Note to self; read WP:CITE again. That's fine then. dihydrogen monoxide (H20) 04:14, 2 March 2008 (UTC)
 * Rugby Union redirects to rugby union. In other words, change to lowercase throughout the article
 * Fixed.
 * "In 2003 he was voted Bachelor of the Year by the readers of Company magazine" - talk about some other awards etc. in this paragraph?
 * Comment: I don't think he's won any other awards, unfortunately :-).
 * Ah well, he picked up an important one then ;) dihydrogen monoxide (H20) 04:14, 2 March 2008 (UTC)
 * "(and second Welshman after Tim Vincent)[9]" - put the ref inside the brackets
 * Comment: Following "Citing sources", shouldn't the footnote number be placed after the punctuation mark – in this case the closing parenthesis?
 * From what I've seen, it usually goes inside, but it's up to you I guess. dihydrogen monoxide (H20) 04:14, 2 March 2008 (UTC)
 * "which drew 9.2 million viewers." - needs ref
 * Fixed.
 * "On 16 February 2008, Jones began presenting a new 15-minute entertainment show entitled E24 on BBC News 24 with James Dagwell" - expand this paragraph or merge with another?
 * Fixed.
 * Move the template and succession box to the bottom of the article
 * Fixed.


 * Hi, thanks for taking the time to review the article. I've indicated my comments above. &mdash; Cheers, Jack Lee  –talk– 20:30, 1 March 2008 (UTC)
 * Passed. dihydrogen monoxide (H20) 04:14, 2 March 2008 (UTC)
 * Again, thanks very much! &mdash; Cheers, Jack Lee  –talk– 04:17, 2 March 2008 (UTC)