Talk:Ghana/GA2

GA Review
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Reviewer: Cwmhiraeth (talk · contribs) 18:13, 18 May 2012 (UTC)


 * I am volunteering to review this nomination. I live in the UK and take an interest in Ghana, a country I have visited. I will be reading the article through and making some preliminary comments in the next few days. Cwmhiraeth (talk) 18:13, 18 May 2012 (UTC)

First reading
I have read carefully through the article. In general the prose and style is good but there are a few problems that I have listed below. I will be looking at the other GA criteria later Cwmhiraeth (talk) 11:00, 20 May 2012 (UTC)


 * General
 * 1) Excessive wikilinking of, for example, "Kwame Nkrumah" and "Jerry John Rawlings". You could look through the article with the "Highlight duplicate links" tool and remove excess links.

✅ Greg  Heffley   22:26, 27 May 2012 (UTC)
 * History
 * 1) Many of the paragraphs lack inline citations.
 * 2) "The Portuguese aim was to trade for Akan gold." is unreferenced and should not be wikilinked in this way.
 * 3) There is an unsatisfactory reference "Webcitation.org, Archived 31 October 2009. " in paragraph 6.
 * Judicial system
 * 1) Mention of Fourth Republic, unmentioned previously
 * Foreign relations and military
 * 1) First paragraph has no inline citations.
 * Foreign relations and military
 * 1) Excessive wikilinking. For example "Gold Coast Regiment" is wikilinked 3 times including the image caption.
 * Economy
 * 1) "27% of Ghana's population are living on less than $1.25 per day, and a rate of 25% youth unemployment" needs attention.
 * 2) In paragraph 2, " ... declining British Empire." -British rule would be better.
 * 3) In paragraph 5, the sentence starting "Ghana's debt was at ..." is awkward and needs rewriting.
 * 4) In paragraph 5, the sentence starting "The escalation of unnecessary borrowing ..." is also awkward and has NPOV issues.
 * 5) Last paragraph on tourism needs an inline citation.
 * Oil reserves in Ghana
 * 1) In paragraph 1, you should remove "y 1990 production was still negligible".
 * 2) In paragraph 2, "GNPC also won a contract" should be GNPC also signed a contract.
 * Seaport
 * 1) In paragraph 1, I suggest ending the last sentence at Niger and omitting the rest.
 * Geography
 * 1) In paragraph 4, the phrase "main source of many tributary rivers" is incorrect. These rivers flow into the lake not out of it.
 * Demographics
 * 1) In paragraph 1, does the phrase "... counted about 6.7 million inhabitants." refer to just the Akan people?
 * Health
 * 1) I suggest changing "have been hampered by a very high rate of corruption" to are believed to have been hampered by a high rate of corruption.
 * Languages
 * 1) In paragraph 2, does the citation cover the languages that follow? If it does, move it to after the list and remove the "citation required" template.
 * Religion
 * 1) In paragraph 1, the sentence "Islam is most populous ..." needs rephrasing.
 * 2) In paragraph 2, can the citation at the end of the first sentence be used to substantiate the next statement?
 * 3) In paragraph 4, the word "into" is missing from the second sentence.
 * 4) In the last paragraph, there are 2 "including"s which is confusing.
 * Culture and media
 * 1) Several paragraphs lack citations.
 * 2) Perhaps boxing should have a separate paragraph from football.
 * Media
 * 1) The first sentence needs to be rewritten to clarify it.
 * Education
 * 1) Several paragraphs lack inline citations.
 * 2) In paragraph 2, the first sentence could just have one inline citation at the end.
 * 3) In paragraph 6, the second and third sentences contain uncited opinions.
 * 4) In paragraph 8, the phrase "educational hot spots" should be reworded.
 * 5) In paragraph 8, what have the visits of these notables got to do with education?