Talk:Ghost (Mystery Skulls song)/GA1

GA Review
Reviewer: Carbrera (talk · contribs) 02:17, 30 March 2016 (UTC)

Hello, I am Carbrera, and I'll be reviewing this article for possible good article submission.

Full review coming very soon. Carbrera (talk) 02:17, 30 March 2016 (UTC)
 * Thanks! editorEهեইдအ😎 21:28, 30 March 2016 (UTC)

Infobox

 * The single cover image requires an alt
 * Added editorEهեইдအ😎 04:26, 2 April 2016 (UTC)
 * The 'Misc' part is correct, as that much spacing should be before each (=), but since this 'Misc' is blank, it should be removed; remember to add that much spacing to the other parts as well before deleting this
 * Done, but why does the spacing matter? Good article and even featured article reviews are meant to analyze how articles look on the outside, not how it looks on inside its source. Also, the Misc isn't blank, it's showing an external link to the music video.

Lead

 * Reword to: ""Ghost" is a song recored by Mystery Skulls, a solo project of American musician Luis Dubuc. It was released as the lead single off of the project's debut album Forever (2014)."
 * Done editorEهեইдအ😎 04:26, 2 April 2016 (UTC)
 * State that it was released by Warner Bros. Records somewhere
 * Done editorEهեইдအ😎 04:26, 2 April 2016 (UTC)
 * According to the infobox, Mystery Skulls as a whole was the producer
 * Changed for clarification editorEهեইдအ😎 04:26, 2 April 2016 (UTC)
 * The last sentence needs to be reworded; let me know how you decide to work with this particular sentence
 * Slightly changed editorEهեইдအ😎 04:26, 2 April 2016 (UTC)
 * I think you could expand the lead; also adding the critical response, any applicable accolades, etc.
 * There isn't really a lot to add to the lead. I did add a brief sentence about the critical reception, but if I was going to expand the lead much more it would be way too long for the amount of content in the body of the article. editorEهեইдအ😎 21:17, 2 April 2016 (UTC)

Production and composition

 * The first sentence is way too long; please condense it into two smaller, more precise sentences; thank you
 * Fixed editorEهեইдအ😎 04:26, 2 April 2016 (UTC)
 * Once again, according to the infobox, Mystery Skulls as a whole was the producer, regardless of if Dubuc is Mystery Skulls, shouldn't it be noted separately?
 * Again, changed in infobox for clarification
 * Remove "finally" before "mastered the track..."
 * Done editorEهեইдအ😎 04:26, 2 April 2016 (UTC)

Release

 * Move this section before 'Production and composition'
 * Reword the section to 'Background and release'
 * Why? The "Production and release" explains the writing of the song before its December 2013 release, which the release section doesn't ever explain, so putting the release section before the "Production and composition" section and including the word "Background" in its title would be inaccurate. I'll still do it if you want me to, but this feels really pointless and out-of-order (and by "order" I don't mean your orders for improving the article to GA status, I mean chronilogically of the song's history timeline) to do.

Paragraph 1

 * Provide a link to Spin Magazine please
 * What? Spin Magazine is linked,
 * You use "re-cut" quite frequently; can you think of another, similar word to use?
 * Replaced one use of re-cut to "remix", although "re-cut" was only used two times before. editorEهեইдအ😎 04:26, 2 April 2016 (UTC)

Paragraph 2

 * Couldn't you expand this into a 'Critical reception' or 'Commercial performance' section? I don't see why not...
 * In the second sentence, you need to state the reviewer's background; you can say "a reviewer from Dance Music Northwest..."
 * Replaced one use of re-cut to "remix", although "re-cut" was only used two times before. editorEهեইдအ😎 04:26, 2 April 2016 (UTC)
 * The last sentence isn't necessary since millions of songs make it onto iTunes; Adele's "Hello" was number one of there for sixty-some weeks, but there is no mention of it on the article because there are so many iTunes stores, and so many different songs available
 * Replaced one use of re-cut to "remix", although "re-cut" was only used two times before. editorEهեইдအ😎 04:26, 2 April 2016 (UTC)

Paragraph 1

 * Avoid SHOUTING in the quotes; just de-capitalize the letters where noted
 * Fixed editorEهեইдအ😎 04:26, 2 April 2016 (UTC)
 * Couldn't you provide a quick recap/plot of the video?
 * The cited plot summary is already in the article. It's shown in the quote of the Noisey article premiering the video, which is presented in the article" "A REALLY GOOD VIDEO. It's got zombies. It's got a funny exorcist. It's got old people looking like they're about to poop their Depends. People (and things) fly through the air. It's neat, and it's all set to an extremely catchy beat" as well as the sentence "which involves a priest who dances through an exorcism". Do you mean an uncited summary of the whole video? editorEهեইдအ😎 04:26, 2 April 2016 (UTC)

Paragraph 2

 * The sentence ending with "PrinceofTheUniverse of Kotaku's Talk Amongst Yourselves described" doesn't make sense to me; the verb of the sentence is the very last word of the sentence, which is grammatically incorrect
 * Fixed editorEهեইдအ😎 04:40, 3 April 2016 (UTC)

End of GA Review:
Since you've mentioned in the article that the track peaked on a few charts, and even was mentioned on a year-end chart, it is necessary that you include this in the article. This article needs a bit of expansion before passing, since the article is missing a few key sections. Please include a 'Track listing' section, 'Credits and personnel' section, and 'Charts' section before I re-review it. I will allow seven days for this process to occur. Thank you. Carbrera (talk) 03:29, 2 April 2016 (UTC)