Talk:Gilberto Barragán Balderas/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Vami IV (talk · contribs) 20:01, 8 April 2020 (UTC)

Opening statement
In reviews I conduct, I may make small copyedits. These will only be limited to spelling and punctuation (removal of double spaces and such). I will only make substantive edits that change the flow and structure of the prose if I previously suggested and it is necessary. For replying to Reviewer comment, please use ✅,, , ❌, , or , followed by any comment you'd like to make. I will be crossing out my comments as they are redressed, and only mine. A detailed, section-by-section review will follow. — ♠Vami _IV†♠  20:01, 8 April 2020 (UTC)
 * Thank you for the thorough review. I believe I have addressed the points below. Cheers! MX ( ✉  •  ✎  ) 19:43, 13 April 2020 (UTC)

Prose

 * In 2010, the U.S. Department of the Treasury sanctioned Barragán Balderas under the Kingpin Act and froze all of his U.S-based assets. It prohibited U.S. citizens and entities from conducting business with him. Condense.


 * Relevant pictures should be added to break up the walls of text.
 * ✅ I've added a public domain pic with the leadership chart of the Gulf Cartel/Zetas where the subject is shown too.


 * Los Zetas should be linked at its first mention in the article text, in "Early life and background", rather than in "Career and indictments".
 * Nice catch, done.


 * an AR-15 rifle with two embedded chargers [...] two .9 mm handguns with embedded chargers What's a charger in this context?
 * I'm not an expert in firearms, but I googled it to make sure and apparently it is known as a "charging handle". In Spanish the text simple says cargadores.
 * After doing my own translation, I found that the cited article says "an AR-15 assault rifle with two supplied magazines". – ♠Vami _IV†♠  20:06, 13 April 2020 (UTC)
 * Thank you, I've amended it to that now. MX ( ✉  •  ✎  ) 23:06, 14 April 2020 (UTC)