Talk:Give Yourself a Try/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: K. Peake (talk · contribs) 20:35, 13 March 2021 (UTC)

You currently have four music GANs pending, so it is definitely fair for me to take one on! --K. Peake 20:35, 13 March 2021 (UTC)

Infobox and lead

 * Infobox looks good!
 * "handled the song's production." → "handled the production." ✅
 * "specifically their song" → "specifically their track" to avoid confusion with the next sentence using "the song" ✅
 * "The song's production consists" → "The former's production consists" to be specific ✅
 * There is too much listed for the lead what it consists of; trim this to avoid a supermarket list, but keep all the influences ✅
 * Same comment as about for the lyrics; try listing a few subjects it covers then put "among others" at the end ✅
 * "and praised the song's lyrics and production, noting it" → "and praised the lyrics and production, noting the song" to be less wordy ✅
 * Mention that the 62nd Annual Grammy Awards were in 2020 ✅
 * Too many chart positions in the lead; remove the US Rock Airplay and Australia ones ✅
 * The room was only inspired by self-reflection, not Lady Gaga ✅
 * Reworded to avoid confusion.  Gia co bbe  talk 11:50, 14 March 2021 (UTC)

Background and release

 * First para looks good!
 * "which led to" → "which led precisely to" ✅
 * "On 1 May," → "On 1 May 2018," ✅
 * Shouldn't [14] also be invoked directly before [15], as it backs up parts of that sentence?
 * Is that necessary if it backs up parts of that sentence and the following sentence? Or would that be WP:OVERCITE?  Gia co bbe  talk 11:54, 14 March 2021 (UTC)
 * I just thought it might be confusing because the readers could think [15] was the only source used for the sentence, but I guess it's ok. --K. Peake 12:19, 14 March 2021 (UTC)
 * No worries I can add it in! I can see what you mean.  Gia co bbe  talk 12:21, 14 March 2021 (UTC)


 * "to 1 June." → "to 1 June 2018." ✅
 * "radio show, set" → "self-titled radio show, set" with the pipe ✅
 * "On 31 May," → "On 31 May 2018," ✅

Writing and recording

 * Quote box looks good!
 * Pipe his generation to Millennials ✅
 * Pipe tension to Tension (music) ✅
 * The release year of "Disorder" should be in brackets on the first mention instead ✅
 * "According to the singer," → "According to the 1975 member," to avoid confusion with the both bands part ✅
 * "where both bands originated." → "where both bands originated from." ✅
 * "Rather than sample the song, the band" → "Rather than sample the song, the 1975" with the pipe ✅
 * Pipe STDS to Sexually transmitted infection ✅
 * "drug addiction were autobiographical." → "drug addiction are autobiographical." for consistency with tense ✅
 * "hard not to become emotional and remain objective." → "hard to remain objective and not become emotional." for correct order ✅
 * "Overall, the singer classifies" → "Overall, the singer classified" ✅
 * "saying it was about" → "saying it is about" because this is about the final song ✅

Music and lyrics

 * Add a comma after the song title on the audio sample text ✅
 * [12][23][20][24] should be put in numerical order ✅
 * "reminiscent of "Disorder"." → "reminiscent of Joy Division's "Disorder"." per this being the music section ✅
 * [27][23][28] same as above ✅
 * Wikilink basslines, but are you sure the word springy is appropriate language for this section? ✅
 * Added quotation marks around "spring", otherwise can paraphrase to "springing".  Gia co bbe  talk 12:10, 14 March 2021 (UTC)


 * "staticy drums,[33] a skittering" → "staticy drums and a skittering" because the influences can go in their own sentence to avoid a run-on; move [33] to the end of the production sentence and place [34] directly after it ✅
 * Img looks good!
 * "and the acknowledgement of" → "and acknowledgement of" ✅
 * Full-stop is not needed after the question mark because that is a full quote ✅
 * Remove pipe on STDs ✅
 * The "new, maturing personality" part is not sourced ✅
 * "a cross between" → "a cross between the" ✅
 * "Thomas Smith of" → "Thomas Smith from" to avoid overusing "of" ✅
 * "Morgan Enos of" → "Morgan Enos from" per above ✅
 * "represents "the point" → "focuses on "the point" ✅
 * "to the Strokes' Room on Fire, "rendered" → "to Room on Fire "rendered" ✅

Critical response

 * Replace the img with a different one, as only two critics are sourced as making this comparison in the section
 * Added some more reviews comparing it to the Strokes for this section :)  Gia co bbe  talk 12:52, 14 March 2021 (UTC)


 * First para looks good!
 * Wikilink Jon Pareles ✅
 * "while suggesting it serves" → "while suggesting the song serves" ✅
 * "writing the song is" → "he wrote the song is" ✅
 * "praised the 1975 for" → "praised them for" ✅
 * "on darker topics despite its" → "on darker topics that appropriately accompany its" per the source ✅
 * Italicise Idolator ✅
 * "big, bold sound of" → "big, bold sound of their singles" with the pipe ✅
 * "comparing it to" → "comparing the song to" ✅

Commercial performance

 * Swap order of [52] and [53], as the UK chart position ref should be first per the prose ✅
 * "of over 200,000 units." → "of over 200,000 units in the UK." ✅
 * "and was later ranked" → "while it later ranked" ✅

Music video

 * "A music video directed by Diane Martel" → "An accompanying music video, directed by Diane Martel," ✅
 * [60][18] put in numerical order ✅
 * "The psychologist is" → "The psychologist that he turns to is" per the source ✅
 * "to perform the song." → "to jam and dance to the song." per the source ✅
 * "are presented as closed captioning" → "are presented with closed captioning" with the wikilink ✅
 * "his problems through others." → "his problems through others' help." ✅
 * "that can help" → "who can help" ✅

Credits and personnel

 * Good

Charts

 * Good

Certifications

 * Good

Final comments and verdict

 * until all of the issues are fixed, another nice article from you though! --K. Peake 09:48, 14 March 2021 (UTC)
 * ✅ now, a few issues popped up after my comments that I fixed and great job in responding within hours; I crossed out the ones you forgot to mark off. --K. Peake 13:32, 14 March 2021 (UTC)
 * Amazing job as always! Your hard work and dedication to reviewing GANs is remarkable! Thank you buddy!  Gia co bbe  talk 13:36, 14 March 2021 (UTC)