Talk:Globalization of the football transfer market

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Overall the information is well organized and there is a clear connection between all topics presented. However, some of the individual sentences could use some restructuring/reordering. One small preferential critique is that in your second paragraph on the 20th Century section, nearly all sentences start with "The". I'm not sure if the headings really accurately describe the information presented thereafter. It might be beneficial to look at the structure/organization and rename the sections.

Melissa F (talk) 16:53, 19 October 2016 (UTC)

Overall a great draft! The article is well structure, facts are relevant, and information is neutral. Nonetheless I would suggest restructuring some long sentences, and inserting "(FA)" after Football Association just to introduce the acronym to the reader.

Thank you for your feedback! I have taken your advice into account and do agree that providing examples in the introduction will enable readers to grasp the term fully. Therefore I have added examples of well-known Philanthropreneurs and recognized philanthropreneurial-ventures to the article's first section. — Preceding unsigned comment added by Elbamaria0005 (talk • contribs) 17:01, 21 October 2016 (UTC)

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