Talk:Glutonny/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Alexandra IDV (talk · contribs) 09:20, 30 October 2020 (UTC)

I've been unsure about reviewing this because I don't follow esports, but it's been waiting for a review for too long, so let's do it.--AlexandraIDV 09:20, 30 October 2020 (UTC)

Infobox/lead Brawl Wii U Ultimate Wario References Images Notes/recommendations not part of GA criteria
 * Glutonny's age does not appear to be backed up by a source - either add a source or remove it
 * I don't know what the best way of handling this would be, but it was not obvious to me that "professional" would be linking to Super Smash Bros. in esports until I hovered over it.
 * "Super Smash Bros" is a short enough title that I wouldn't consider it worth it to shorten it to the less formal "Smash Bros." / "Smash for Wii U" / "Ultimate". This applies across the article.
 * the best Wario is gaming jargon and not appropriate here since we write for general audiences - would suggest changing all instance of calling him a Wario to "Wario player"
 * Using "title" to mean "game" is probably not the best here, since it can be misread as being about the "best [SSB] player in Europe" type of titles
 * Italicize game titles.
 * Is his brother notable? If so, mention his name; if not, it's fine as it is
 * Give some context for SKATAR, I can't tell how major of an event it is
 * What is Panda Global?
 * Link ESPN
 * he was considered the best Wario player in Europe in Super Smash Bros. Brawl,[35] the best Wario in the world in Super Smash Bros. for Wii U,[54] and is a contender for the best Wario in the world in Ultimate. Grammar issue here - you can either format this as "he was considered X and Y, and is a contender" or "he was considered X, Y, and a contender", but not "he was considered X, Y, and is a contender". Basically, the final item in the list of the things he's considered needs an "and".
 * Glutonny's gaming handle was inspired his use of Wario as well as by the character Gluttony from Fullmetal Alchemist. "inspired by". Also, italicize Fullmetal Alchemist.
 * he can get anywhere on the map that he needs to be. is not literally true - rephrase
 * Smashboards seems to be a message board, unclear how this is a usable source.
 * Dexerto and EventHubs are listed as unreliable sources on WP:VG/RS
 * Main infobox image is good
 * It would be nice to be able to illustrate the second half of the article since there's a lot of text. Are there any freely usable images of the events or of any of the more prominently mentioned players that we can use? If not, that's fine.
 * I highly recommend adding brief alt text to the image, to aid readers with impaired vision

Aside from these points, it looks all right - main issue might be the sources. I will put this review on hold for seven days - ping me when you have addressed the issues or if you have any questions, and I'll respond asap. Thank you~!--AlexandraIDV 10:02, 30 October 2020 (UTC)
 * As the nominator has not responded after a week, even after I left a reminder on their user page, and has not otherwise been active on Wikipedia since October 22, and the above issues still remain unresolved, I will unfortunately have to fail this. Feel free to re-nominate it if you have more time to work on the article later.--AlexandraIDV 15:54, 8 November 2020 (UTC)