Talk:Glynn Lunney/Archive 1

May 2008
Thank you to Antandrus for amending the middle names you beat me by 10 seconds Stevefrommelbourne (talk) 03:15, 9 May 2008 (UTC)

Article review
It's a great article as is, but, here's a few things I notice that might improve it:


 * A longer into. It should summarize the entire article while presenting most of the main or significant points.
 * It can't hurt to have plenty of inline citations. I recommend at least one per paragraph.
 * Acronyms should be spelled out the first time (NASA and NACA, for example).
 * Second paragraph: what's ``NACA?``

The prose is smooth, good writing. Cla68 04:19, 28 August 2006 (UTC)


 * Thank you for your review! I'll make those suggested improvements over the next day or two. MLilburne 08:50, 28 August 2006 (UTC)

GA review
A couple of minor points that I copy edited, (see article history). Good article there is still room for more expansion especially post NASA. Does the sentence about meeting his wife need to be the opening of the section on NASA. A quote or actual citation from one of his awards would be an enhancement to that section. Gnangarra 05:27, 4 September 2006 (UTC)


 * Thank you for your comments! I'll be expanding the article a bit over the next few weeks, and will try to find a quote from one of the awards. MLilburne 15:11, 4 September 2006 (UTC)

a little over the top
Sure the guy is impressive but the tone of the article strikes me as a little to hagiographic. Cinnamon colbert (talk) 14:30, 9 May 2008 (UTC)
 * You have to strike a balance between objectivity and reality; between providing an accurate picture and unfairly playing down what actually happened. I admit it does seem a bit over-the-top, but 99% of the information on this guy is like that.  It's an unavoidable side-effect of what he took part in.  It would be unfair to him to make "educated guesses" about what "really happened" in order to tone down the article.  The most objective information you could probably get on Lunney is probably buried in a KGB file somewhere in Moscow, but good luck getting to it.  Besides.  I think those terrible pants more than balance it out.  (I am a registered Wikipedia user, JohnnyWishbone, I just am on a different computer and am too lazy to log in.  :P)  —Preceding unsigned comment added by 69.104.228.30 (talk) 16:57, 9 May 2008 (UTC)

Why add the white team to an article about Glynn Lunney?
Beginning with Chris Kraft, each flight control team in mission control was identified by a color. The color was chosen by the Flight Director that led that team. When someone was promoted to Flight Director status, he picked a color whereby his flight control team would be known. Chris Kraft was Red, John Hodge was Blue, Gene Kranz was White, and Glynn Lunney chose the color Black. "Black Flight" or "the Black Team". There is no reason to mention Gene Kranz's White Team in an article about Glynn Lunney 65.34.250.94 (talk) 01:58, 15 July 2008 (UTC)Ken Smith boeing70@comcast.net

too many primary sources
This article is sourced almost entirely by oral histories, which are considered primary sources. This article does not meet verifiability and reliable source standards of Wikipedia. Regards, &mdash; mattisse (Talk) 23:49, 17 August 2009 (UTC)

1961?
Did Lunney go to Houston in 1961? Lyndon B. Johnson Space Center says that it opened in September 1963. Bubba73 You talkin' to me? 01:52, 24 September 2015 (UTC)


 * Yes, he probably did. If you read the Space Center history a bit more carefully, you see that it was organizationally created (announced) on September 19, 1961. Almost immediately, NASA started leasing temporary office and lab space in Houston until the center campus was completed in 1963. It could be worded a bit more clearly here. And for future reference, Template:Disputed is intended to be used as a hatnote, not to break up in-line prose. There must be an inline equivalent of it. JustinTime55 (talk) 12:28, 24 September 2015 (UTC)


 * Thank you. Bubba73 You talkin' to me? 13:54, 24 September 2015 (UTC)

Assessment comment
Substituted at 16:26, 29 April 2016 (UTC)

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