Talk:Go Farther in Lightness/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: K. Peake (talk · contribs) 08:19, 10 August 2023 (UTC)

(Criteria marked are unassessed)
 * 1) It is reasonably well written.
 * a. (prose, spelling, and grammar):
 * b. (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
 * 1) It is factually accurate and verifiable.
 * a. (reference section):
 * b. (citations to reliable sources):
 * c. (OR):
 * d. (copyvio and plagiarism):
 * 1) It is broad in its coverage.
 * a. (major aspects):
 * b. (focused):
 * 1) It follows the neutral point of view policy.
 * Fair representation without bias:
 * 1) It is stable.
 * No edit wars, etc.:
 * 1) It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
 * a. (images are tagged and non-free content have non-free use rationales):
 * b. (appropriate use with suitable captions):
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass/fail:
 * 1) It is broad in its coverage.
 * a. (major aspects):
 * b. (focused):
 * 1) It follows the neutral point of view policy.
 * Fair representation without bias:
 * 1) It is stable.
 * No edit wars, etc.:
 * 1) It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
 * a. (images are tagged and non-free content have non-free use rationales):
 * b. (appropriate use with suitable captions):
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass/fail:
 * No edit wars, etc.:
 * 1) It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
 * a. (images are tagged and non-free content have non-free use rationales):
 * b. (appropriate use with suitable captions):
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass/fail:
 * b. (appropriate use with suitable captions):
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass/fail:
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass/fail:
 * Pass/fail:

This is quite an old nomination for the GAN backlog! --K. Peake 08:19, 10 August 2023 (UTC)

Infobox and lead

 * The exact release date needs to be sourced in the body as 18th August
 * Same for the recording months
 * Sony Music Studios, Sydney → Sony Music, Sydney
 * The lead is quite disordered at the moment; the first sentence should be followed by the info currently in the second para, then reception and awards followed by commercial performance and legacy
 * "It debuted at number one" → "The album debuted at number one"
 * Mention it was certified platinum in Australia and by the Australian Recording Industry Association (ARIA)
 * "the album won four awards" → "four awards were won by Gang of Youths"
 * "Go Farther in Lightness's lyrics focus" → "its lyrics focus"
 * "bleakness and triumph,"" → "bleakness and triumph"," per MOS:QUOTE
 * Shouldn't the tour be mentioned by name in the lead?
 * "where three tracks from the album placed" → "where three other tracks placed"
 * "was critically acclaimed by reviewers and" → "was acclaimed by music critics and"
 * "It topped the annual" → "A top position was achieved the annual"
 * "and two of its tracks featured" → "and two of the tracks featured"

Background

 * Add the "I don't think" part to end the frontman's quote
 * Where is the EP release sourced in relation to his quote?
 * No visa complications are sourced

Composition

 * I think swapping these sub-sections would make for the correct order

Lyricism

 * "something you love,"" → "something you love"," per MOS:QUOTE – these are throughout when you have punctuation inside quotes at unsuitable points
 * Where are the recurring themes sourced?
 * Pipe soul to Human spirit

Production and recording

 * Wikilink Darlinghurst to itself
 * Avoid any usage of claim per WP:CLAIM
 * Audio sample looks good!
 * I have noticed more MOS:QUOTE issues in this sub-section, as I explained for the other one
 * "interludes for the album" → "interludes for Go Farther in Lightness"
 * The interpolation is not sourced

Release

 * Retitle to Release and promotion
 * Wikilink David Le'aupepe on the img text
 * The release date is sourced as 9 February with no music video, mention this was the lead single from Go Father in Lightness too
 * "They would later perform" → "Gang of Youths would later perform"
 * The ARIA position needs a source and the link should be to ARIA Charts
 * "was released on 26 July" → "was released on 26 July 2017"
 * The sixth and final single is not sourced
 * Remove wikilink on Australian Albums Chart and this needs to be sourced; if not, change the information
 * Reword the certification sentence to saying the album was certified in Australia by the Australian Recording Industry Association (ARIA) with the number of copies

Tour

 * "made their United States TV" → "made their US TV" per MOS:US
 * "The band toured" → "Gang of Youths toured"
 * "They performed for" → "The band performed for"

Critical reception

 * "received widespread critical acclaim." → "was met with widespread critical acclaim from music critics."
 * "calling it "a remarkable" → "calling the record "a remarkable"
 * MOS:QWQ issues again
 * "called the album "a" → "called Go Farther in Lightness "a"
 * Remove pipe on The Music

Legacy

 * "has been featured in" → "has led to rankings in" and end the sentence here, starting a new one for RS
 * "It also topped" → "The album also topped"
 * The Powderfinger, Chet Faker and 200 parts are not sourced
 * "Further, two more songs featured" → "Furthermore, two songs featured"
 * "has become the band's" → "has become Gang of Youth's"
 * Remove the 95 million part since it's not sourced
 * Table looks good!

Track listing

 * Good

Personnel

 * Good

Charts

 * Good

Certifications

 * Good

Final comments and verdict

 * until all of the issues are fixed; this is a bit messy but good luck! --K. Peake 19:08, 11 August 2023 (UTC)
 * Hey @Kyle Peake, I believe I've made all the suggested edits. Thanks so much for the feedback! Marcostev88 (talk) 13:00, 18 August 2023 (UTC)
 * You still need to get rid of the duplicate RS ref as I pointed out. --K. Peake 07:04, 19 August 2023 (UTC)
 * @Kyle Peake fixed— sorry about that. Marcostev88 (talk) 15:38, 19 August 2023 (UTC)
 * ✅ now, well done on picking up quickly on the remaining problem! --K. Peake 16:48, 19 August 2023 (UTC)
 * @Kyle Peake Thanks for the review, appreciate your time! Marcostev88 (talk) 01:04, 20 August 2023 (UTC)