Talk:God Control/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: MarioSoulTruthFan (talk · contribs) 17:23, 14 May 2020 (UTC)

Infobox
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 * Add release date of the album
 * hi-NRG → not on given source (see below)

Lead
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 * and was co-produced by Mike Dean → so is he a producer or co-producer?
 * It includes experimental pop, disco and hi-NRG sounds → It is an experimental pop, disco and hi-NRG song
 * critics → music critics + wikilik to music journalism
 * director of the music video?
 * Do you mind adding another positive take to the music critic portion here?
 * I've mentioned the comparisons to 'Bohemian Rhapsody', let me know if it's OK
 * You are taking it a bit out of context there. Just remove it. MarioSoulTruthFan (talk) 18:45, 15 May 2020 (UTC)

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Background and composition

 * instruments and singing → instruments, singing
 * (2005); Mike Dean → (2005), as well as Mike Dean
 * "God Control" was written by Madonna and Ahmadzaï. It was produced by Madonna, Ahmadzaï and Mike Dean → "God Control" was written by Madonna and Ahmadzaï and produced by the latter two along with Mike Dean
 * It belongs to the Experimental pop, disco and hi-NRG genres → It has been described as an Experimental pop, disco and hi-NRG song
 * hi-NRG → not on given source
 * '''Mentioned on The Guardian source: "God Control was presumably made after an all-nighter on Reddit – a rambling “Wake up sheeple! [...] And all of it set to hi-NRG disco with cascading strings and Daft Punk vocoders"


 * Musically... → vocodered vocals → add as well, from The Irish Times source
 * Let me know if how I added it is correct
 * It is fine. MarioSoulTruthFan (talk) 18:17, 15 May 2020 (UTC)

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 * What follows is → It is followed by

Reception

 * critics → music critics
 * 'Bohemian Rhapsody'". → "Bohemian Rhapsody"."
 * '''Did this for all reviews as I can't just change one and leave the others. Let me know if it's oK
 * Its ok. MarioSoulTruthFan (talk) 15:52, 15 May 2020 (UTC)

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Background and synopsis

 * Thousand Oaks shootings.[20][23][25][24] → four source in a row make the text very clunky, lets make a maximum of three
 * Regarding the statement above, a full stop midsentece would do the trick with the respective sources.
 * across the screen → remove
 * The image should appear first
 * What do you mean ?--Christian (talk) 17:47, 15 May 2020 (UTC)
 * I mean put the image on top of the section. MarioSoulTruthFan (talk) 17:52, 15 May 2020 (UTC)
 * I decided tu put the image there, as it was next to the actual synopsis of the video, but I've changed it.--Christian (talk) 17:56, 15 May 2020 (UTC)

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Reception

 * There is no need for the quote box to disrupte another section, it could be above or make it a litlle bit bigger
 * '''I left it here as it looked (on my computer) aesthetically pleasing, it didn't 'cut' or overlapped text or the other section. Let me know if I should change it.
 * So it depends on the screen I see, move it to the top of the section like the previous image. MarioSoulTruthFan (talk) 18:31, 15 May 2020 (UTC)
 * All done (I've also made it a little wider.--Christian (talk) 19:52, 15 May 2020 (UTC)


 * Ryan Reed from Rolling Stone quotes are giving a copyright violation of 54% you need to fix that, use your own words.
 * Same as previous apply to People magazine quotes but in much lesser degree
 * Let me know if this and previous points are correct now


 * using her "platform" to raise awareness → I don't unsertand this, can you explain it?
 * '''That's how the sources quotes it; changed it to "bringing awareness", let me know if it's correct
 * Much better. MarioSoulTruthFan (talk) 18:31, 15 May 2020 (UTC)

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Live performances

 * Madonna then appeared decked in a Revolutionary War attire → not on given source
 * From Variety Source: ...like when she does the Hustle in the aforementioned Revolutionary War costume during “God Control”

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Credits and personnel

 * Mastering and mixing?
 * I tried to search for the album's complete credits but I couldn't find them; the liner notes don't list the either. Just the writers, producers and backing vocals
 * It's fine. MarioSoulTruthFan (talk) 15:53, 15 May 2020 (UTC)

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Overall
I had some doubts this could have been a single, ut I have seent the comments above. MarioSoulTruthFan (talk) 18:32, 15 May 2020 (UTC)
 * All done with the comments ! I look forward to the rest regarding the music video! Thank you!! --Christian (talk) 15:54, 15 May 2020 (UTC)
 * All done ! Just have a couple of comments/questions I hope you can clear up :) --Christian (talk) 18:14, 15 May 2020 (UTC)
 * three issues to address and then its good to go.
 * I've fixed the lead section ; what other issues need addressing? o: --Christian (talk) 18:59, 15 May 2020 (UTC)
 * I think I finally got the reduction of the Rolling Stone 'violation' fixed; let me know if it works. Also, out of topic, but I seem to remember there was a tool here in wiki that helped you see how much quotations you were using on an article, do you know which one is it?--Christian (talk) 19:26, 15 May 2020 (UTC)
 * It fine now has the quotes are from Maddona and the music video. I have no clue, I'm sorry. MarioSoulTruthFan (talk) 19:43, 15 May 2020 (UTC)