Talk:Goldberry/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Amitchell125 (talk · contribs) 15:57, 16 June 2021 (UTC)

Happy to review this article.
 * Thanks for taking it on. Chiswick Chap (talk)

Lead section/Infobox

 * Link George MacDonald.
 * Done.


 * from the works of author – 'from the works of the author'?
 * Added.


 * called is redundant.
 * Gone.


 * Shouldn't published in 1954 and 1955 be ‘first published in 1954 and 1955’, as they have been published many times?
 * Done.


 * Amend lyric to ‘lyric poem’ (linked to Lyric poetry). This also occurs in the text below the lead section.
 * Done.


 * I would include Catholic within the link sacrament of marriage.
 * Done.

1 Origins

 * I would link Tolkien (with his initials included) the first time he appears in the main text of the article (see MOS:DL). Ditto Bombadil.
 * Done.


 * the river Withywindle within the Old Forest – move the link to where readers would expect it (Old Forest).
 * Done.


 * In a letter – the year would be useful here.
 * Added.


 * Frodo (+ Baggins) should be linked here and not further down in the article. Ditto The Fellowship of the Ring.
 * Done.


 * Who is Isabelle Pantin?
 * Glossed.


 * Link George MacDonald.
 * Done.

2 Appearances

 * Consider a link to water lilies (Nymphaeaceae).
 * Done.


 * The last sentence is uncited.
 * Done.

3 Analysis

 * Link Middle-earth.
 * Done.


 * Who are Ann McCauley, Leo Carruthers, Ruth Noel, Gene Hargrove, Taryne Jade Taylor,  Christina Ljungberg, Melissa McCrory Hatcher, Ann McCauley Basso, Robert Chapman-Morales and John D. Rateliff? As they are listed in the References section whenever they are cited, are they notable enough to be also named in the text?
 * Scholars. Since we're directly attributing views to most of them one by one, it's hard to see how we can avoid naming them really. If we were to write "One scholar believed ... while another suggested ..." a heap of gnomes would at once decorate the article like the Trafalgar Square Christmas tree with a colourful array of interesting "who?" "what?" and "clarify" tags. So, generally best not. I've glossed some of them and removed one or two names where it was possible.
 * OK. AM


 * Unlink Finnish (MOS:OL).
 * Done.


 * frequently proposed explanation – why frequently?
 * Gone.


 * It’s not clear to me why the article Nature is linked here, which imo discusses something else.
 * The link is to Mother Nature; glossed.
 * Looks better. AM


 * I would unlink Botticelli-like within the quote, as the link leads to a biography of an artist (and not a explanation of what the phrase means).
 * Done.


 * Tolkien presents her – amend to ‘Tolkien presented her’ (as he is deceased).
 * Edited.


 * Unlink J.R.R. Tolkien Encyclopedia as it is a duplicated link.
 * Done.


 * The poetry looks a little odd in terms of the spacing, might using Template:Poem quote be better?
 * Done.

4 Adaptations

 * The image on WikiCommons cannot be verified, as http://tolkiengateway.net/wiki/Image:Goldberry.jpg no longer exists.
 * Replaced image. (Actually, the Commons page confirms the file was reviewed in 2016, so it's pukka.)


 * Is the image notable, or is it simply a drawing by a devoted Tolkien fan?
 * Removed.


 * Unlink Old Man Willow; Old Forest twice (duplicated links).
 * Done.


 * Link Terence Tiller; cartoon (Animation).
 * Done.


 * Imo adaptation project can be deleted as redundant text.
 * Gone.


 * Some other adaptations – two are named, but are there others, as is implied by the text?
 * No such implication. Edited.


 * I'm not sure here, but I'm guessing MMORPG is used more than the full phrase, and could replace it.
 * Well, maybe, but this is a general encyclopedia.
 * Understood. AM


 * No actress was credited for the role. - Excessive detail?
 * Gone.

5 See also

 * I’m unclear why Korrigan is listed – perhaps a small explanation could be added? (see MOS:ALSO).
 * Added.

6 Notes

 * The note refers to an online publication, but this information might be better off as an external link.
 * It's certainly more useful here as it's where the reader can actually find the poem, next to where they might want to consult it.
 * Understood. AM


 * The poem title should be in italics.
 * Done.

8 Sources

 * I’m confused about this section – if both books are sources, wouldn't they appear in the References section and not here?
 * No need, let's call it Bibliography, these are the two particularly-Bombadil texts.

On hold
An nicely-written article, with issues that can easily be addressed. I'm putting it on hold for a week until 30 June to allow time for the issues raised to be sorted out. Regards, Amitchell125 (talk) 20:53, 22 June 2021 (UTC)
 * Many thanks, I think we're all done now. Chiswick Chap (talk) 22:12, 22 June 2021 (UTC)

Passing
All sorted, now at GA level, so happy to pass it. All the best, Amitchell125 (talk) 07:26, 23 June 2021 (UTC)