Talk:Golf Ball/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Status (talk · contribs) 05:28, 21 June 2012 (UTC)


 * Lead needs to be expanded. Way too short.
 * I tried to expand, but keep in mind the article itself is quite terse.--TonyTheTiger (T/C/BIO/WP:CHICAGO/WP:FOUR) 06:46, 21 June 2012 (UTC)
 * Detail --> Description
 * Fixed.--TonyTheTiger (T/C/BIO/WP:CHICAGO/WP:FOUR) 06:40, 21 June 2012 (UTC)
 * Critical commentary - Reception; no need for two paragraphs, they can all fit in one
 * Fixed.--TonyTheTiger (T/C/BIO/WP:CHICAGO/WP:FOUR) 06:40, 21 June 2012 (UTC)
 * The work "...give us both the impression of space and the fact of surface..." --> No need for the dots.
 * Why not?--TonyTheTiger (T/C/BIO/WP:CHICAGO/WP:FOUR) 06:55, 21 June 2012 (UTC)
 * This is usually required when you are doing, for example, an "according to..." and you are cutting off some of what the person said. According to Zach, "no need [...] dots". This is just a sentence in which some part of it is taken from someone else's mouth.  Statυs (talk) 06:59, 21 June 2012 (UTC)
 * I'll trust your judgement.--TonyTheTiger (T/C/BIO/WP:CHICAGO/WP:FOUR) 07:50, 21 June 2012 (UTC)


 * Nothing further.


 * All issues addressed. ✅ Passing the article!  Statυs (talk) 07:52, 21 June 2012 (UTC)