Talk:Gonadarche

Wiki Education assignment: Foundations II
— Assignment last updated by Ainfante21 (talk) 17:33, 22 July 2023 (UTC)

Foundations II [First 1000 Days] Peer Review
Do the group’s edits substantially improve the article as described in the Wikipedia peer review “Guiding framework”?
 * Previously, the article contained a definition and minor elaboration on the subject matter. The group has significantly improved this article in its depth of knowledge. The physiology section was a great introduction into the topic! I am a bit unclear on what the Prognosis section is referring to - is it the prognosis for the listed set of disorders? Kiana Hocutt (talk) 18:15, 1 August 2023 (UTC)
 * The article has been significantly improved - the topic is defined clearly and goes in depth by listing symptoms, comparison in sex, and different disorders associated with the topic. Sh.ucsf (talk) 18:21, 1 August 2023 (UTC)


 * Significant improvement in both language and content of the article, including expansion on endocrinology and even added figures! The structure of the article flows well except for the final Prognosis section. It is unclear if prognosis refers to all or one of the conditions described above; may consider including as a sub-section of Diseases rather than its own section. May also consider added brief information re: diseases in lead paragraph. ElizabethHu3 (talk) 18:24, 1 August 2023 (UTC)

ChristianHailozian1 (talk) 20:01, 1 August 2023 (UTC)
 * Yes there has been a substantial improvement to the content, organization, formatting and overall quality of this article.

Has the group achieved its overall goals for improvement? ChristianHailozian1 (talk) 20:02, 1 August 2023 (UTC)
 * The group has achieved their goals for improvement by completing all of their proposed edits and elaborating on each one of them. Sh.ucsf (talk) 18:22, 1 August 2023 (UTC)
 * The group achieved all listed goals for improvement, and struck an appropriate balance of brevity while providing sufficient information.Kiana Hocutt (talk) 18:31, 1 August 2023 (UTC)
 * The group has achieved their overall goals for improvement. ElizabethHu3 (talk) 18:43, 1 August 2023 (UTC)
 * Yes the group has achieved their overall goal for improvement.

Does the draft submission reflect a neutral point of view? (explain)
 * The article was largely written in a neutral tone, with exception of the penultimate paragraph of the Central Precocious Puberty [CPP] / Progressive Precocious Gonadarche section. Stating an approach is flawed may not appear as neutral. It may be appropriate to reference the controversy of the height-outcomes approach, without passing specific judgement on its quality - assuming that there are conflicting study results. Kiana Hocutt (talk) 18:27, 1 August 2023 (UTC)

Are the points included verifiable with cited secondary sources that are freely available? (explain)
 * Some references are physical books and not accessible online; may have to change to online sources/e-book for it to be verifiable/freely available. Reference should be edited to only have the year - some of them have month and date. Sh.ucsf (talk) 18:35, 1 August 2023 (UTC)

Are the edits formatted consistent with Wikipedia’s manual of style? (explain) Do the edits reflect language that supports diversity, equity, and inclusion? (explain)
 * For the most part the edits are consistent with Wikipedia's manual of style. There are some inconsistencies with punctuation, capitalization, and formatting that do not take away from the credibility content but are not fully in line with the listed guidelines.  ChristianHailozian1 (talk) 19:32, 1 August 2023 (UTC)
 * Overall language is neutral and inclusive, and I do not see any inflammatory or potentially problematic language use. ElizabethHu3 (talk) 18:52, 1 August 2023 (UTC)

Kiana Hocutt (talk) 18:09, 1 August 2023 (UTC)

Foundations II Group A [Gonadarche] proposed edits
-Briefly discuss physiology and specifically, describe the role of endocrine system in gonadarche.

-Describe specific endocrine/hormonal factors implicated with gonadal maturation — Preceding unsigned comment added by Jdecano032 (talk • contribs) 17:53, 1 August 2023 (UTC)

-Diseases associated with gonadarche.

-Add citations. JDavidUCSF (talk) 23:01, 25 July 2023 (UTC)