Talk:Good Girl Gone Bad Live/GA1

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Reviewer: Hahc21 (talk · contribs) 15:54, 14 September 2012 (UTC)

Review

 * Background and release
 * Good.


 * Technicalities and synopsis
 * Good


 * Documentary
 * "She also explains how flying with private jet together with her team which is like "one family" is fun, but also very rare." >> "She also explains how flying in private jet with her team like "one family" is fun, but very rare"
 * — Tomica   (talk)  17:33, 16 September 2012 (UTC)


 * "Scenes of Rihanna performing a show in Ischgl are shown. After the performance Rihanna and part of her team are out on the streets having snowball fight." Could this me merged into a single sentence?
 * — Tomica   (talk)  17:33, 16 September 2012 (UTC)


 * "were touring for a lot of time" >> a lot of time? I think is more proffesional to say "a considerable amout of time" or similar
 * — Tomica   (talk)  17:33, 16 September 2012 (UTC)


 * "and become very close so" >> "and became"
 * — Tomica   (talk)  17:33, 16 September 2012 (UTC)


 * Critical reception
 * "giving four stars and wrote that" different tenses. Say "gave it four stars and wrote" or "giving four stars and writing"
 * "isn't going to win" The way you start the quotation makes a break on the sentence. Better to say that he wrote that "it isn't going to win"
 * "their recorded version" it may be "verisons"
 * Well. I've read the section and the prose is quite weird. I consider rewriting the entire section with a more cohesive and fluent prose.
 * — Tomíca (T2ME) 17:55, 5 October 2012 (UTC)


 * Commercial performance
 * "before falling to number 19 for the week dated August 16, 2012." 2012?
 * "in the United States alone" if you say RIAA, you don't have to write this, as it is redundant.
 * "In Australia, Good Girl Gone Bad Live entered the Australian Music DVD Chart at its peak of number six for the issue dated June 30, 2012" 2012?
 * "The next week... The next week" Overuse of the next week here.
 * "however, it rose to number one the next week" next week is way too used. Try to use the following week or another word.
 * — Tomíca (T2ME) 17:55, 5 October 2012 (UTC)

Everything else seems to be very good. — ΛΧΣ  21™  19:10, 28 September 2012 (UTC)