Talk:Gould Memorial Library/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Mike Christie (talk · contribs) 00:34, 9 September 2022 (UTC)

I'll review this. Mike Christie (talk - contribs - library) 00:34, 9 September 2022 (UTC)

Images are appropriately tagged; sources are reliable; Earwig finds no issues. Spotchecks: -- Mike Christie (talk - contribs - library) 13:45, 9 September 2022 (UTC)
 * The link in the lead and body to oculus goes to a dab page.
 * Fixed. It seems like the Oculus (architecture) page was moved just yesterday, as that was where the link previously pointed. Epicgenius (talk) 13:40, 9 September 2022 (UTC)
 * "Additionally, the university installed numerous busts of artists inside the library during the 1920s and 1930s. NYU built additional campus libraries": repetition of "additional/ly"; I think you could just cut the first one.
 * Done. Epicgenius (talk) 13:40, 9 September 2022 (UTC)
 * "The Hall of Fame was designed to conceal the Gould Memorial Library's foundation; the portion of the colonnade next to the library is circular in plan": the two halves of this sentence are presumably related since they're glued together, but I don't see the connection.
 * I have split the sentences. It would have made sense if Gould was round, but it's not. Epicgenius (talk) 13:40, 9 September 2022 (UTC)
 * "it is superseded by the Bronx Community College Library, which opened in 2012." Suggest either "it has been superseded by the Bronx Community College Library, which opened in 2012", or "it was superseded by the Bronx Community College Library in 2012".
 * I went with the first one. Gould was closed long before the BCC Library opened. Epicgenius (talk) 13:40, 9 September 2022 (UTC)
 * "The library, as well as the adjacent buildings, are all clad with": "as well" is redundant with "all"; suggest "The library and the adjacent buildings are clad with" or "all clad with".
 * I chose the first option here. Epicgenius (talk) 13:40, 9 September 2022 (UTC)
 * "The arrangement of the building, with its dome and porticoes, was reminiscent of the University of Virginia's Rotunda." Why "was"?  If this is because the similarities were noticed by contemporaries when it was built, I'd make it something "was considered reminiscent" with a date; if it's still true I'd make it "is considered reminiscent".
 * Done. Epicgenius (talk) 13:40, 9 September 2022 (UTC)
 * Suggest linking or glossing "ambulatory".
 * I glossed it. The ambulatory isn't mentioned previously in the article (I think I modeled this off the Low Memorial Library page and got lazy). Epicgenius (talk) 13:40, 9 September 2022 (UTC)
 * "counting clockwise of the main entrance": unless this is AmEng I'm not familiar with I think this should be "counting clockwise from the main entrance"
 * Oops, my bad. You're correct. Epicgenius (talk) 13:40, 9 September 2022 (UTC)
 * In the seating discussion you're using some digits and some words for numbers; I can see you consistently use digits for seat count, but that probably doesn't comply with the relevant style rules. How about getting around it with a rephrase, like so: "Radiating from the center were eight long and eight short tables; the short tables seated four people, and the long tables seated eight people"?
 * Done. Epicgenius (talk) 13:40, 9 September 2022 (UTC)
 * Suggest linking brutalist.
 * Done. Epicgenius (talk) 13:40, 9 September 2022 (UTC)
 * "The formerly residential area surrounding Washington Square Park had evolved into a commercial neighborhood by the late 20th century": presumably should be 19th century?
 * Oops, my bad. Epicgenius (talk) 22:03, 9 September 2022 (UTC)
 * "asking the architect if he would be interested in examining plans for NYU's Bronx campus": just checking that "examining" is the intended verb -- it implies that there already were plans for the campus before White's involvement, but we haven't said that, and the following sentence implies that the "original" plan is White's.
 * I've fixed this now. The plans that were already in place weren't architectural plans. McCracken wrote that letter to ask White to create the architectural plans. Epicgenius (talk) 22:03, 9 September 2022 (UTC)
 * FN 41e cites "The balcony on the fourth level, above the colonnades, contains a plaster balustrade with openwork motifs, interrupted by 16 plaster pedestals with Tiffany glass mosaics." Verified.
 * FN 100 cites "The library was also used for ... a showcase of old maps of the Bronx": verified.
 * Thanks for the review. I've fixed the remaining issues now. Epicgenius (talk) 22:03, 9 September 2022 (UTC)

Fixes look good; passing. Mike Christie (talk - contribs - library) 02:16, 10 September 2022 (UTC)