Talk:Graeter's/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Mz7 (talk · contribs) 11:27, 2 February 2019 (UTC)

Having grown up eating the black raspberry chip, I can already tell that my mouth will be watering and my nostalgia returning by the time I finish reading this article. Mz7 (talk) 11:27, 2 February 2019 (UTC)
 * Just to note, I'm going to be very busy this week. I plan to have this done by the weekend, however! Mz7 (talk) 07:08, 6 February 2019 (UTC)
 * I'm going to add some notes as I go, just so it doesn't seem like I'm not working on this. Mz7 (talk) 02:11, 11 February 2019 (UTC)
 * Just to note, I plan to have this done today. I apologize for the delay. Mz7 (talk) 09:47, 15 February 2019 (UTC)
 * I'm afraid this is going to have to be delayed again to Sunday due to real-life work. In the meantime, feel free to respond to the notes I've already provided. Mz7 (talk) 01:24, 16 February 2019 (UTC)


 * I am pleased to say I am finally finished with my review, and indeed, I am now yearning to go back to Ohio for some Graeter's. I've placed the article review – please take a look at my comments below and let me know if you have any questions or would like to discuss them. Mz7 (talk) 10:28, 19 February 2019 (UTC)
 * Thank you! I will get to fixing this in the next few days here. Tristan (talk) 19:01, 19 February 2019 (UTC)
 * Thanks for looking at it! I have finished my responses to everything below. I think I took action on them all. Tristan (talk) 23:05, 13 March 2019 (UTC)
 * Sorry for my delay here. I took a look over, and I think you've resolved them satisfactorily! So with that, I'm happy to pass this review. Well done! I'll be sure to grab some black raspberry chip next time I'm in Ohio. Mz7 (talk) 02:29, 19 March 2019 (UTC)

Infobox

 * The type parameter should indicate the type of business this is in the context of corporate law, as I understand. For example, if Graeter's is a privately held company, the type parameter should read . See Template:Infobox company/doc.
 * For industry, is "Retail" accurate? Something like "Restaurants" would make more sense, I think.
 * For the founded parameter, the template documentation recommends using Start date and age, i.e.

Lead

 * Since then, the ice cream brand has attained notoriety with a number of celebrities and media publications declaring its quality. - I feel the word "notoriety" here is kind of misplaced. It implies that Graeter's is famous for something bad. Consider being more neutral and direct, something like "Since then, a number of celebrities and media publications have commented on the ice cream brand's quality."
 * I would remove the word "high-end" per WP:PEACOCK.

History

 * Perhaps we could add a new heading called "First generation heading"? There are headings for second, third, and fourth generation – this would make it consistent.
 * Louis Graeter spent time in Stockton, California, where he remarried for a time, opened another ice cream store, and eventually returned to Cincinnati around 1900. - So, I got my hands on a copy of Heigel's book, and I don't think the book verifies that Graeter opened yet another ice cream store while he was in Stockton.
 * The ice cream business was steady but slow through the 1960s, though it then began to pick up. - I would try to find a way to rephrase this sentence. I have a copy of Heigel's book, and I think this sentence is too closely paraphrased from the source.

Ice cream shops

 * Eventually, the company bought back the Columbus and Dayton franchise in 2010 and now owns all of the stores in Ohio. - This seems outdated, as above in the History section, it states, That year, it also finalized a deal to purchase 11 stories in Louisville, Lexington and Indianapolis from its last major franchisee, Jim Tedesco of Tedesco LLC, bringing all of its over 50 retail locations under company management.
 * the company predicts its shipping business could grow to 40 percent of its overall revenue mix - This is in 2010, right? Maybe change to "the company predicted in 2010 its shipping ..."