Talk:Grand Slam (PBA)/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: PapaJeckloy (talk · contribs) 15:08, 1 September 2014 (UTC)

Will review this article, moments later. -PAPAJECKLOY (hearthrob! kiss me! &#60;3) (talk) 15:08, 1 September 2014 (UTC)

1. Well-written: a. the prose is clear and concise, it respects copyright laws, and the spelling and grammar are correct ✅ b. it complies with the manual of style guidelines for lead sections, layout, words to watch, fiction, and list incorporation. ✅

2.Verifiable with no original research: a.it contains a list of all references (sources of information), presented in accordance with the layout style guideline ✅ b.it provides in-line citations from reliable sources for direct quotations, statistics, published opinion, counter-intuitive or controversial ✅ c.statements that are challenged or likely to be challenged, and contentious material relating to living persons—science-based articles should follow the scientific citation guidelines ✅ d. it contains no original research.✅

3. Broad in its coverage ✅

4. Neutral: it represents viewpoints fairly and without bias, giving due weight to each. ✅

5. Stable: it does not change significantly ✅

6. Illustrated: ❌ The article do not have any photo (Free or non-free), to the nominator please add a non-free file (one) in the article, to illustrate the points in the article, and i also see that you have many free photos of players and instances about Philippine Basketball Association, so you are freely to add a photo in the article, as it's a requirement for GA. -PAPAJECKLOY (hearthrob! kiss me! &#60;3) (talk) 15:26, 1 September 2014 (UTC)


 * It is clear that the reviewer is not competent to identify issues with the prose, since not a single one was found, which is extraordinary in a GAN article. Even the best writers make typos or omit punctuation. The prose in this article, however, is not clear, and the grammar is not correct; that much is evident in the "1976 Crispa Redmanizers" section:
 * The first sentence reads: "In the second season of the league, the Crispa Redmanizers became the first team to win all of the conference championships in a season, they have won the All-Philippine Championship, the third conference of the 1975 season, before they began their quest for the Grand Slam." This is two sentences, this first of which should end after "in a season". For the second sentence, the tense is wrong ("have" should be "had"), and I would remove the final clause, "before they began their quest for the Grand Slam" as unnecessary and tighten the rest. That sentence would now read, "They had won the All-Philippine Championship in the 1975 season."
 * A later sentence contains the problematic phrase "with an overall season record of 47-15 win-loss card". The simplest thing to do is to delete "win-loss card"; if it's necessary, then the earlier part of the sentence needs revising.
 * There are additional prose issues in the rest of the article. Since they need to be identified and fixed for this to achieve the prose standards required for a GA, I would recommend closing the review and putting this back in the queue for a new reviewer. BlueMoonset (talk) 16:01, 1 September 2014 (UTC)