Talk:Grandaddy/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Khazar2 (talk · contribs) 12:42, 24 October 2013 (UTC)

Hi Lachlan, I'll be glad to take this one; sorry you've had to wait so long for a reviewer. Comments to follow in the next 1-3 days. Thanks in advance for all your work! -- Khazar2 (talk) 12:42, 24 October 2013 (UTC)

On first pass, this looks quite good for prose/sourcing/neutrality. In particular, the prose is clean and readable compared to a lot of nominations I've been reviewing this week! Thanks again for your work on it. Just a few small questions/action points so far. Next I'll do source and image review.


 * "In 2011, he released his third All Smiles album, Staylow and Mighty." -- tagged since June as needing citation.
 * If I may…? I just had a quick look, it's not on AllMusic but Rocksucker.co.uk has this, which was the first thing I looked at, and describes the album as "out now" on 1 September 2011 (scroll to the end), any good? I see that Rocksucker.co.uk has been cited in a number of articles, but I didn't find any mention of it at WP:RS/N. Nortonius (talk) 14:00, 24 October 2013 (UTC)
 * Yeah, that looks fine--thanks for chiming in! I'll add it in a minute. -- Khazar2 (talk) 14:08, 24 October 2013 (UTC)
 * Okay, done. Nortonius, if you also want to untangle that bit about Burtch, this is ready to pass. Otherwise I can take a look later; I'm working on another review at the moment, so popping back and forth. -- Khazar2 (talk) 14:16, 24 October 2013 (UTC)
 * My pleasure, thanks for taking this on Khazar2. Nortonius (talk) 14:35, 24 October 2013 (UTC)


 * "Burtch has been in a band" -- why the "has been" here instead of "was"?
 * "Burtch and Lytle, along with Earlimart's Aaron Espinoza and Ariana Murray, have since formed" -- so did Burtch not rejoin Grandaddy? Or is he in all three of these bands? The timeline's a bit unclear in this paragraph; it also seems redundant with the above discussion of Admiral Radley -- Khazar2 (talk) 13:13, 24 October 2013 (UTC)
 * I've made some changes, does it look any better now? Nortonius (talk) 14:35, 24 October 2013 (UTC)