Talk:Graveyard Mountain Home/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Adabow (talk · contribs) 00:58, 21 November 2010 (UTC)


 * dead links to fix
 * Unfortunately, the Transcending the Mundane interview and review have been offline since early September and look unlikely to come back online. I can't find any archived versions of the pages at archive.org, so I'll have to go through and delete everything which relies on those sources. Una LagunaTalk 15:14, 21 November 2010 (UTC)


 * File:CK GraveydMntnHome.jpg needs a source ✅ Una LagunaTalk 15:14, 21 November 2010 (UTC)

Lead

 * First paragraph should be merged into another ✅ Una LagunaTalk 15:14, 21 November 2010 (UTC)
 * You need to cover all sections in the lead, including composition ✅ Una LagunaTalk 15:14, 21 November 2010 (UTC)
 * Make clear that Ghost Book is the name of the soundtrack, not the film ✅ Una LagunaTalk 15:14, 21 November 2010 (UTC)

Background

 * Theron Patterson does not need linking ✅ Una LagunaTalk 15:14, 21 November 2010 (UTC)
 * "InsideOut Records offered to sign Moore to their label." → rewrite ✅ Una LagunaTalk 15:14, 21 November 2010 (UTC)

Composition

 * This section doesn't really cover the composition of the album, it is more of an extension to the background section. Focus on musical genres and styles and lyrics
 * Moved the paragraph on personnel to the Background section; the rest of the information should fit in Composition. Una LagunaTalk 15:14, 21 November 2010 (UTC)


 * "plan to record an "organic, and less digital"[1] album," - place ref after comma
 * In a previous GAR, I was told that cites must go directly after quotes finished. Una LagunaTalk 15:14, 21 November 2010 (UTC)


 * Link chord progression
 * Paragraph removed - source offline. Una LagunaTalk 15:14, 21 November 2010 (UTC)


 * Remove red links as they are not notable people ✅ Una LagunaTalk 15:14, 21 November 2010 (UTC)
 * ""an extreme"[4] of his work," - ref after comma
 * See above. Una LagunaTalk 15:14, 21 November 2010 (UTC)

Release and promotion

 * Good work here

Reception

 * Unlink Millenia Nova ✅ Una LagunaTalk 15:14, 21 November 2010 (UTC)
 * 'Anderson described the music as "at times is funky in a glitchy, herky-jerky sort of way..."' - this incorporated quote is grammatically incorrect ✅ Una LagunaTalk 15:14, 21 November 2010 (UTC)
 * "there were some "traditional"[8] songs on the album," = ref after comma
 * See response in Composition section. Una LagunaTalk 15:14, 21 November 2010 (UTC)

Track listing

 * Source for writers?
 * Isn't it common sense where the sources for writers, personnel, and the track listing itself are from? I've done a few album GAs now and this hasn't been an issue, but I can add the if you like.
 * It is up to you, however I have always thought that it makes sense to source things like this, and it avoids disputes later on. There is the template cite music release notes designed for this purpose. Adabow (talk · contribs) 01:03, 22 November 2010 (UTC)
 * Not sure if that's how you want it formatted, but I've added the sources in for this and the personnel section. Una LagunaTalk 17:12, 30 November 2010 (UTC)


 * You can incorporate the additional writers of songs into the  field in track listing
 * There are so few additional writers that I figured an extra column, which would mostly be empty, would be unnecessary. Una LagunaTalk 15:14, 21 November 2010 (UTC)

Personnel

 * Source?
 * See track listing section. Una LagunaTalk 17:12, 30 November 2010 (UTC)