Talk:Great Lakes Areas of Concern

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Discussion: Andy
Kate, this is where I'll be communicating to you about your article. You can do vice-versa if you have questions or anything else to ask me about your article.

Footnotes and References
 * Footnotes
 * All of your footnotes are in working condition... except, I cannot see two of your sections in the article, though they are in the edit box... strange, yes. They are, Atmosphere section and Where are the AOC's section.  What happened to them?  I don't know.  1013-andy 02:04, 29 April 2007 (UTC)
 * Sorry, my mistake. I fixed it.  All of your footnotes are completed and up to date.  No need to worry about them anymore.  1013-andy 02:42, 29 April 2007 (UTC)


 * References


 * Questions
 * Okay, so I just wanted to let you know that you're going to need a Reference section in your article. As of now, you only have the Footnotes section.  Both are necessary.  So yeah, if you could just list your references and give me as much information about those references that'd be great.  (For example, such as author, website URL address, Date you visited the website, Date the website was published, what the name of the article is, name of Internet company that you found the article in...  of course, sometimes one isn't able to find all of those... but just getting as much as you can is what Hacker suggests.)  Don't worry about getting them in the right order.  I can do that.  If you write down the info, I'll clean it up.  1013-andy 00:56, 29 April 2007 (UTC)

Hey Kate... alrighty so I Good luck with the rest of your final revisions! 1013-andy 06:01, 4 May 2007 (UTC)
 * re-formatted your References section so it is updated and all correctly formatted.
 * Your periods have now been placed "in front" of the ref tag.
 * And the last four sections (Footnotes, References, See also, and External links) have been alphabetized according to Wikipedia standards.

Discussion: Dan
Hey Kate, I think you have a good article that discusses an important issue. The main problem is that the article doesnt seem encyclopedic at times. The last section where you discussed what a person can do to help is too informal. I would recommend changing this and a few other parts around to make them more professional. I'll try editing a few things to show you what I mean.1013-Dan 17:23, 1 May 2007 (UTC)

General Edits


 * I completely reformatted your last section on "what you can do." I tried to make it so that the section seemed more encyclopedic. I made the paragraph into a list of options.  Another thing that might be good is to add is another subsection on the public/gov solutions to the problem.  It would list/describe all the laws and organizations (including the agreement you detailed) that have a part in the Great Lakes AOC. 1013-Dan 03:26, 2 May 2007 (UTC)
 * Added internal link to acid rain 1013-Dan 05:29, 2 May 2007 (UTC)
 * Nonpoint Source Pollution - deleted last sentance 1013-Dan 05:29, 2 May 2007 (UTC)
 * Point Source Pollution - edited wording of paragraph1013-Dan 05:29, 2 May 2007 (UTC)
 * Invasive Species - added internal links, edited paragraph wording 1013-Dan 05:29, 2 May 2007 (UTC)
 * Changed the main paragraph to flow better1013-Dan 05:29, 2 May 2007 (UTC)

Discussion: Precious
Hey kate,

I thought you had a good paper with a lot of details. There was clear information that seemed to flow well with your topic. I felt that i kept up with your topic and became more knowledgable by reading your article. You had a few sentences that needed rewording, and a few grammar mistakes but other than that you have a well coming article.

Hey Kate, I just went over your article again and i think if you add a little more informtion to your last section on atmospheric pressure it could strengthen your article. Tonight i will look and see if i can find you some more information on that section. I didn't see any grammar mistakes but i will stop by tomorrow to check again.1013-precious 04:27, 3 May 2007 (U

Hey Kate,

I was looking on the internet and found a website that may help you and give you more ideas. http://www.great-lakes.net/envt/pollution/aoc.html. Let me know if it help.19:05, 4 May 2007 (UTC) Theres also another site that has a special report gor the great lakes.http://www.ijc.org/php/publications/html/aoc_rep/english/report/index.html.1013-precious 19:06, 4 May 2007 (UTC)

Discussion: Other Wikipedians
I've tagged the article with inappropriate tone. Asking questions in the headings ("Why Are They Areas of Concern?") makes the article seem like an FAQ rather than an encyclopedia article. If you need some help with style editing, just let me know. ShadowHalo 23:04, 3 May 2007 (UTC)


 * Looks like the header was changed to "Threats" and some other tone problems addressed. What do you think? Does this tag still apply? 1013-josh 10:28, 4 May 2007 (UTC)
 * Looks better now, so I went ahead and removed the tag. ShadowHalo 14:34, 4 May 2007 (UTC)

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Improving "The Great Lakes Water Quality Agreement" Section
This section is very strong in introducing readers to current policies that regulate pollution. However, I have three comments that could make this section stronger:

1) There are a lot of references to different policies currently in place like the Boundary Waters Treaty. However, there is only one citation for this entire section that does not reference where you found all of the policies listed

2) A current policy that is missing includes the The Lake Erie Management Plan (LAMP). This section fails to address that pollution can differ in each lake. Thus, this policy shows that there may be different regulations to address each of the different lakes. This source may be useful: https://www.epa.gov/greatlakes/lake-erie

3) The last sentence of this section was improperly cited. There is a quotation mark at the very end of the sentence, but there is no quotation mark that comes before to denote where the quote started. Thus, this could be a form of plagiarism if taken word for word. However, I looked at the citation at the end, and I think you were able to rewrite the concepts of the source in your own words. So, I would get rid of that quotation mark at the end to avoid any confusion. Also, the last part of the sentence is awkwardly written, " they can cause serious damage to the plant and animal life." I would rewrite this and be more specific to how and include any policies that address preserving biodiversity in the Great Lakes. Car24 (talk) 04:48, 5 November 2016 (UTC)Car24

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