Talk:Great hammerhead/GA1

GA Review
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Hi, I am reviewing this article for GA. It is a generally good article. I have a few comments regarding  the prose which I am sure you can easily address. &mdash; Mattisse (Talk) 22:33, 27 April 2009 (UTC)
 * Comments
 * "prey items" - prey is enough, "items" is unnecessary - so I have removed "items"
 * OK


 * the cephalofoil functions to pin down stingrays, - what does "pin down" mean? I interpreted it to mean that it kept the population of stingrays down, but then in the article I see you mean literally pin down. I don't think this wording is good for the lead.
 * Changed to "immobilize"; open to other suggestions


 * "The great hammerhead was first described as Zygaena mokarran in 1837 by the German naturalist Eduard Rüppell, who changed it to Sphyrna mokarran later that year" - what is "it"
 * "It" being the name; made it explicit


 * "However, for a long time" - vague, not encyclopedic wording
 * Changed to "over 200 years"


 * "coined" - are scientific names coined?
 * In the sense that the person who describes it picks the name, yes


 * "The lectotype for this species is a male from the Red Sea." - what does this mean?
 * A lectotype is a specimen chosen after a species has already been described, to serve as the type specimen for that species - I thought it'd be distracting to explain all this in the article


 * "the ancestral condition" - unclear what this means
 * The ancestral condition is the trait exhibited by the ancestors, in this case it means the earliest hammerheads had large cephalofoils - reworded to make this clearer


 * "Its presence is uncertain off Gambia, Guinea, Mauritania, Sierra Leone," - what does this mean?
 * It's what the IUCN report says; I'd interpret it as meaning that there are large hammerheads in those regions suspected to be great hammerheads, but identification is not 100% certain - I reworded the sentence


 * "documented as moving closer to the poles in the summer" - is this both north & south poles?
 * Yes - they follow warming water in the summer, which means northward in the northern hemisphere and southward in the southern hemisphere

Hope my notes are clear! &mdash; Mattisse (Talk) 22:33, 27 April 2009 (UTC)
 * Addressed comments; not sure whether you wanted me to change things for some of them or not. -- Yzx (talk) 23:13, 27 April 2009 (UTC)


 * You have done a good job. &mdash; Mattisse  (Talk) 23:30, 27 April 2009 (UTC)
 * Final GA review (see here for criteria)


 * 1) It is reasonably well written.
 * a (prose): Clearly written b (MoS): Follows the main MoS elements
 * 1) It is factually accurate and verifiable.
 * a (references): References are good b (citations to reliable sources): They are reliable  c (OR): No OR
 * 1) It is broad in its coverage.
 * a (major aspects): Covers major areas b (focused): Remains focused on the topic
 * 1) It follows the neutral point of view policy.
 * Fair representation without bias: NPOV
 * 1) It is stable.
 * No edit wars etc.:
 * 1) It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate.
 * a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass/Fail:
 * Congratulations! Good work.
 * 1) It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate.
 * a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass/Fail:
 * Congratulations! Good work.
 * Congratulations! Good work.
 * Congratulations! Good work.

&mdash; Mattisse (Talk) 23:30, 27 April 2009 (UTC)