Talk:Greed (1924 film)/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Khazar2 (talk · contribs) 18:43, 10 December 2012 (UTC)

I'll be glad to do this review--as it happens, I've both read this book and seen the movie. I hope to begin tomorrow. -- Khazar2 (talk) 18:43, 10 December 2012 (UTC)

Prose
Some minor prose issues to clarify--my apologies in advance that some of these are nitpicky.
 * "This is the beginning of a lifelong rift between the pair" --clarify the "pair" here--you mean Schouler and McT, yes?
 * " later claims to have found still water in their basement" --in the basement of their apartment building? Or in the home they inspect? The "their" is ambiguous here.
 * "This begins to be an issue for McTeague" --a vague sentence that could be clarified.
 * "Norris once stated "Fiction is what seems real, not what is real."" --This sentence seems out of place in this paragraph. Was he speaking specifically about McTeague? If not, why is the sentence relevant to understanding McTeague, or Stroheim's adapation of it? I'd suggest either giving more context or cutting out the line.
 * "many former friends of Frank Norris" leaves it unclear if Norris is dead or simply unpopular.
 * "ZaSu Pitts" is spelled three different ways in the course of the article (ZaSu, Zasu, Zazu)
 * Linking of actors' names seems excessive; Hersholt, Gowland, and others are linked repeatedly.
 * "in appalling conditions" is slightly POV; this could probably be expressed without the judgement. ("harsh"?) -- Khazar2 (talk) 04:04, 11 December 2012 (UTC)
 * Hi, I took care of all these. I never noticed that ZaSu Pitts was spelled differently. I just got rid of that quote, I agree that it didn't go anywhere. Great suggestions, thank you. --Deoliveirafan (talk) 05:37, 11 December 2012 (UTC)
 * Thanks for getting to those so fast! I've got only one more for you:


 * "10 Greatest Films ever made" and "The Most Important and Misappreciated American Films of all time" --capitalization seems irregular on these--is it correct that only part of the list titles be capitalized?
 * I've completed my first close read-through, and it looks good. I never realized what a funny guy von Stroheim was. I'll start the checklist in a bit. -- Khazar2 (talk) 13:42, 11 December 2012 (UTC)

Evaluation

 * Done and done, great ideas. --Deoliveirafan (talk) 02:33, 12 December 2012 (UTC)