Talk:Greef Karga/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: The Rambling Man (talk · contribs) 15:06, 23 April 2020 (UTC)
 * Thanks for taking on another review, ! — Hunter Kahn 16:41, 26 April 2020 (UTC)

Comments That's all I have so I'll put it on hold for now. The Rambling Man (Stay indoors, stay safe!!!!) 10:45, 27 April 2020 (UTC)
 * "the Bounty Hunters' Guild," always a bit odd to "part link" a "formal title". I would unlink and go for linking bounty hunter at the next chance.
 * Yeah, I think you're right. Changed. — Hunter Kahn 05:27, 30 April 2020 (UTC)
 * " in a handful of episodes" curious about this as there's only been a handful of episodes of the whole show!  Four episodes really is still a handful!
 * lol Changed this to say he was originally only supposed to make a brief apperance. — Hunter Kahn 05:27, 30 April 2020 (UTC)
 * "ensures everyone follows" not everyone, just bounty hunters. Presumably "ensures its members follow"?
 * Good call. Changed. — Hunter Kahn 05:27, 30 April 2020 (UTC)
 * "so far" is a little like WP:CURRENTLY. Maybe "as of the end of  the first season"?
 * Changed. — <b style="color:#C0C0C0">Hunter</b> <b style="color:#595454">Kahn</b> 05:27, 30 April 2020 (UTC)
 * What's a cantina?
 * Changed to "bar". — <b style="color:#C0C0C0">Hunter</b> <b style="color:#595454">Kahn</b> 05:27, 30 April 2020 (UTC)
 * "a big job" seems a little informal...
 * Changed to "a lucrative job". — <b style="color:#C0C0C0">Hunter</b> <b style="color:#595454">Kahn</b> 05:27, 30 April 2020 (UTC)
 * "who insists of meeting " ENGVAR? insists on meeting?
 * Yup, should've been "on". Fixed that. — <b style="color:#C0C0C0">Hunter</b> <b style="color:#595454">Kahn</b> 05:27, 30 April 2020 (UTC)
 * "the Force " the should be inside the pipe.
 * Fixed. — <b style="color:#C0C0C0">Hunter</b> <b style="color:#595454">Kahn</b> 05:27, 30 April 2020 (UTC)
 * Lots of triple-referencing going on, per WP:CITEKILL any chance of reducing it a little?
 * I can certainly do this; will get on it tomorrow, as it's getting a bit late for me now. — <b style="color:#C0C0C0">Hunter</b> <b style="color:#595454">Kahn</b> 05:27, 30 April 2020 (UTC)
 * "him.[20][17][21] " ref order.
 * Fixed. — <b style="color:#C0C0C0">Hunter</b> <b style="color:#595454">Kahn</b> 05:27, 30 April 2020 (UTC)
 * I think you've linked "stormtroopers" in other similar articles.
 * Oops, right you are. Fixed. — <b style="color:#C0C0C0">Hunter</b> <b style="color:#595454">Kahn</b> 05:27, 30 April 2020 (UTC)
 * ""Chapter 8: Redemption"" you've already linked this as the season's "finale".
 * Removed the wikilink. — <b style="color:#C0C0C0">Hunter</b> <b style="color:#595454">Kahn</b> 05:27, 30 April 2020 (UTC)
 * "The character is slated to return..." well Weathers has said he's definitely in it so isn't it stronger than slated?
 * Changed to "will return". — <b style="color:#C0C0C0">Hunter</b> <b style="color:#595454">Kahn</b> 05:27, 30 April 2020 (UTC)
 * "Actor Carl Weathers said..." no need to reintroduce Weathers here.
 * Changed. — <b style="color:#C0C0C0">Hunter</b> <b style="color:#595454">Kahn</b> 05:27, 30 April 2020 (UTC)
 * Particularly as you have "Weathers has described his " in the previous sentence.
 * Oops, yeah, lol.
 * "and Carl Weathers has" no need for Carl here.
 * Removed, — <b style="color:#C0C0C0">Hunter</b> <b style="color:#595454">Kahn</b> 05:27, 30 April 2020 (UTC)
 * "2019,[45][46] According" should be a period.
 * Fixed. — <b style="color:#C0C0C0">Hunter</b> <b style="color:#595454">Kahn</b> 05:27, 30 April 2020 (UTC)
 * "showrunner Jon Favreau " both overlinked. And both overlinked in the caption too.
 * Removed the wikilinks from the photo caption and the Portrayal section. — <b style="color:#C0C0C0">Hunter</b> <b style="color:#595454">Kahn</b> 05:27, 30 April 2020 (UTC)
 * "enjoys" tense?
 * Changed to "enjoyed". — <b style="color:#C0C0C0">Hunter</b> <b style="color:#595454">Kahn</b> 05:27, 30 April 2020 (UTC)
 * " series, and in " one too many run-ons. Split here.
 * Done. — <b style="color:#C0C0C0">Hunter</b> <b style="color:#595454">Kahn</b> 05:27, 30 April 2020 (UTC)
 * "Weathers said ... Weathers performed... Weathers said " repetitive.
 * It's Weathers' world, my friend; we're just living in it! Lol I changed a few "Weathers" to other words to reduce the repetition. — <b style="color:#C0C0C0">Hunter</b> <b style="color:#595454">Kahn</b> 05:27, 30 April 2020 (UTC)
 * "study the different energies the director and actors brought" feels whimsical, can this be "quoted" rather than written in Wikipedia voice?
 * I just reworded it a bit. — <b style="color:#C0C0C0">Hunter</b> <b style="color:#595454">Kahn</b> 05:27, 30 April 2020 (UTC)
 * "particular enjoyed" +ly
 * Oops, yeah, fixed. — <b style="color:#C0C0C0">Hunter</b> <b style="color:#595454">Kahn</b> 05:27, 30 April 2020 (UTC)
 * " with "The Client", " -> "with the Client"
 * Changed. — <b style="color:#C0C0C0">Hunter</b> <b style="color:#595454">Kahn</b> 05:27, 30 April 2020 (UTC)
 * "Screen Rant ranked" overlinked.
 * Removed the link in Critical Reception. — <b style="color:#C0C0C0">Hunter</b> <b style="color:#595454">Kahn</b> 05:27, 30 April 2020 (UTC)
 * "performance of Carl Weathers, " no need for Carl.
 * Changed. — <b style="color:#C0C0C0">Hunter</b> <b style="color:#595454">Kahn</b> 05:27, 30 April 2020 (UTC)
 * Thanks again ! I'll try to take care of that WP:CITEKILL issue tomorrow and then I think we'll be all set unless you had anything else... — <b style="color:#C0C0C0">Hunter</b> <b style="color:#595454">Kahn</b> 05:27, 30 April 2020 (UTC)
 * No, I have nothing more. Give me a ping when you're ready for a final run-through.  Cheers. The Rambling Man (Stay indoors, stay safe!!!!) 08:04, 30 April 2020 (UTC)
 * I believe I've addressed the WP:CITEKILL issue you had raised (most of the examples of three citations were ones in which I could simply remove one because it was just reinforcing information from the other two) so I think that addresses everything you had now, but let me know if you had any other thoughts or comments. Thanks! — <b style="color:#C0C0C0">Hunter</b> <b style="color:#595454">Kahn</b> 21:26, 1 May 2020 (UTC)
 * All good, thanks for your hard work. I'm promoting.  I'll hopefully pick up another of your nominations in due course!  Cheers. The Rambling Man (Stay indoors, stay safe!!!!) 21:34, 1 May 2020 (UTC)