Talk:Green Bay East–Green Bay West football rivalry/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: The Rambling Man (talk · contribs) 17:14, 23 September 2019 (UTC)

Comments
 * I'm not sure you should be using an em-dash here, rather it ought to be an en-dash. Indeed, later in the lead you have " the East-West rivalry" hyphenated...
 * Page renamed.


 * " 62–49–3," this could use some "hover over" text or similar for those who aren't aware this means W-L-T.
 * Added. Now signifies East wins/West wins/ties.


 * "played in the East-West rivalry" is this an ENGVAR thing when you say a coach "played" in the rivalry?
 * ''I have updated this so it is more clear that Lambeau was in the rivalry as a player but later inducted to the HOF as a coach.


 * "Milwaukee Journal Sentinel " should be in italics.
 * Done.


 * "on November 30, 1905 at" comma after 1905.
 * Done.


 * The lead says it was played annually since 1905 but there's no sign of a 1906 edition.
 * ''The article notes that the district cancelled the 1906 game only to reverse the decision. Added to lead.


 * Should the table of results have a footnote relating to the uncertainty over the score of the 1905 match?
 * Sure, if you feel it should, but I'm not sure how to add it via source editor.


 * " to win 7 straight" seven.
 * Fixed.


 * " Despite fears of the series.... " too many run-on clauses here.
 * Fixed.


 * Where is the Spanish flu fears/cancellations referenced?
 * Ref added.


 * " Green Bay Press-Gazette" italics.
 * Fixed.


 * " seven of the next 16" seven/sixteen or 7/16.
 * Fixed.


 * " citing near-zero " which temperature scale?
 * Added.


 * It's a shame attendance isn't included in the overall table of results.
 * I agree. It's not in the source, however.


 * "—East against Preble and West against Southwest--" looks like an em-dash and two hyphens. Suggest you replace both with en-dashes.
 * Fixed.


 * "The report of the first game from the December 1st, 1905 issue of the Press-Gazette." (1) fragment so no period, (2) date-> December 1, 1905 (3) comma after 1905 (4) italics for newspaper.
 * Altered the caption. I really do not think there needs to be a comma after the year (as it was or is now).


 * "1905—2005" should be an en-dash, not an em-dash.
 * Fixed.


 * Does the table meet the minimum requirements of MOS:ACCESS e.g. row and col scopes?
 * ''I honestly don't know, because I'm using a template? Guidance accepted here.


 * "NFL Alumni" alumni.
 * Fixed.


 * Tables aren't sortable so don't overlink terms e.g. Green Bay Packers is linked every time and no need for that.
 * Delinked.

That's it on a first run through. The Rambling Man (Staying alive since 2005!) 11:49, 30 September 2019 (UTC)
 * OK,, I've gone through and made most of the changes. I'm a little confused about how to implement the table fixes you talked about, so I would appreciate some extra explanation or help. Replies to your comments in italics. Etzedek24 (I'll talk at ya) (Check my track record) 17:09, 30 September 2019 (UTC)
 * Edit: OK, I think I did the MOS:ACCESS headings for the table of alumni? Still would appreciate feedback, as no one has ever raised this point on a GAN before. Etzedek24 (I'll talk at ya) (Check my track record) 17:13, 30 September 2019 (UTC)
 * I know, I'm sorry, I'm applying more stringent comments (which are actually optional, but beneficial to our readers). Thanks for taking them on board and working with them.  I've made a couple of tweaks but I'm generally happy now that the article passes GA.  The Rambling Man (Staying alive since 2005!) 17:18, 30 September 2019 (UTC)