Talk:Greg Mancz/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Bcschneider53 (talk · contribs) 12:24, 16 June 2017 (UTC)

I'll take this one. --Bcschneider53 (talk) 12:24, 16 June 2017 (UTC)


 * GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)


 * 1) It is reasonably well written.
 * a (prose, no copyvios, spelling and grammar): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
 * 1) It is factually accurate and verifiable.
 * a (reference section): b (citations to reliable sources):  c (OR):
 * 1) It is broad in its coverage.
 * a (major aspects): b (focused):
 * 1) It follows the neutral point of view policy.
 * Fair representation without bias:
 * 1) It is stable.
 * No edit wars, etc.:
 * 1) It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
 * a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass/Fail:
 * 1) It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
 * a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass/Fail:
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass/Fail:

Lead

 * The lead is only two sentences right now. It could definitely be expanded a bit.
 * I expanded the lead. Let me know if you think it needs more. WikiOriginal-9 (talk) 18:33, 16 June 2017 (UTC)

Early years

 * No issues.

2011–2013

 * Almost every sentence here starts with "He". Perhaps you could try combining some sentences or using his surname to make it less repetitive.
 * The 2012 paragraph is only one sentence. Either expand it (maybe highlights from one or two games) or merge it with the 2011 season paragraph.
 * Added his surname in places and merged the sentence. WikiOriginal-9 (talk) 18:24, 16 June 2017 (UTC)

2014

 * He moved to center for the 2014 season." Any reason why?
 * "He then returned, and started, in the team's GoDaddy Bowl" Change to "He then returned as a starter in the team's GoDaddy Bowl"
 * Fixed both. Let me know if you think his move to center needs better wording. WikiOriginal-9 (talk) 18:49, 16 June 2017 (UTC)

Professional career

 * No issues.

Personal life

 * I think that last sentence can just be merged with the main paragraph.
 * Merged. WikiOriginal-9 (talk) 18:25, 16 June 2017 (UTC)