Talk:Grey Matters (Fringe)/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Queenieacoustic (talk) 18:08, 12 May 2011 (UTC)

Plot

 * 1) ...and then her obsessive compulsive disorder started soon after. Replace "then" with "that".
 * 2) ...Newton has already learned what he needs to know and escapes. Olivia manages to stop their escape... "Escape" is used twice in a very narrow range. You could for example replace "their escape" with just "them".

Production

 * 1) ...it was Nimoy's third episode and consequently last commitment as a guest actor to Fringe... Replace "to" with "on".
 * 2) Remember to add (pictured) after the pictured person's name in the caption.

Cultural references

 * 1) I suspect Re-Animator is an adaptation of Herbert West-Reanimator?

Reception

 * 1) "Grey Matters" was watched by an estimated 6.33 million viewers in the United States. Add "In its original American broadcast on [date]," to the beginning, remove "in the United States" and replace it with "according to Nielsen Media Research".
 * 2) Remember to refrain from strong words like "love" or "hate" unless they are part of the review.
 * 3) Since John Noble is mentioned by full name in the Production section, you only need to refer to him by his last name the second time.
 * 4) Remember to italicize Fringe even when the texts are copied from reviews, and also remember to not italicize website names.

Lead

 * 1) Why is the first sentence in the plot summation written in past tense?
 * 2) There's an unfinished parenthesis in the second paragraph.

And that's pretty much it. There were no major problems at all, the article was a pleasure to read and when fixed, it will certainly be a worthy GA. I'll put the article on hold for seven days so that the changes can be made. Good luck! Queenieacoustic (talk) 18:08, 12 May 2011 (UTC)
 * All fixed. Thanks for the thorough review!  R uby2010   comment!  18:46, 12 May 2011 (UTC)
 * Looks good, well done! The article Passes! Queenieacoustic (talk) 18:55, 12 May 2011 (UTC)