Talk:Guilty Gear Isuka/GA2

GA Review
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Reviewer: Tezero (talk · contribs) 01:20, 10 March 2014 (UTC)

The article's close; I only really have a few gripes about wording and grammar.
 * "PS2 version" --> "the PS2 version"
 * "configuration, that" --> "configuration that"
 * "start a fight" --> "starts a fight"
 * Dequote all instances of "soul" except the first.
 * "intallments features" --> "installments' features"
 * "allows to perform" --> "allow the player to perform"
 * "super moves and break combinations and super moves, respectively.": This is ambiguous. Is it that the tension gauge allows the player to use super moves and break combinations, while the burst gauge only allows them to use super moves?
 * "It introduces" --> "The game introduces"
 * "originally for PlayStation 2" --> "not included in the arcade version". Also, remove the parentheses.
 * "a robot (Robo-Ky II)" --> "a robot named Robo-Ky II"
 * Also remove the parentheses in the sentence after that.
 * "nearly every character's aspect (including buckles and hair)" --> "nearly every aspect of the characters, such as buckles and hair"
 * "to survival mode" --> "to the survival mode"
 * "the company said that Guilty Gear Isuka was the game's name.": Ambiguous. Was this said at JAMMA? Did they correct themselves using that statement, or was it simply a new name for the game?
 * "the Atomiswave arcades" --> "Atomiswave arcade cabinets"
 * "was noted to sound as good ideas" --> "were considered good ideas in theory"
 * "it causes a "chaos"" --> "found it to cause "chaos""
 * "Its new features, poorly executed," --> "The perceived poor execution of its new features"
 * "other addition" --> "other additions"
 * "criticized how" --> "he criticized how"
 * "(from top to down)": Add a colon after it.
 * "On the side of burst gauge, there is the character's "souls".": "The character's "souls" lie on the side of the burst gauge." Tezero (talk) 01:20, 10 March 2014 (UTC)
 * Thank you very much, . I hope I've had corrected all issues you pointed with this edit. What is your verdict? Gabriel Yuji (talk) 01:36, 10 March 2014 (UTC)
 * Eh, it's improved, but there are a few new mistakes as a result. I'll just correct it myself later and then pass the article. Tezero (talk) 01:38, 10 March 2014 (UTC)
 * Ok. Gabriel Yuji (talk) 01:42, 10 March 2014 (UTC)