Talk:Guitar Hero World Tour/GA1

GA Review
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 * "Guitar Hero World Tour is the first game in the Guitar Hero series to feature drum and microphone controllers for percussion and vocal parts. Gameplay is similar to the competing Rock Band series of games." – assuming people don't know what Rock Band is, perhaps keep it but make it smaller, like "Guitar Hero World Tour is the first game in the Guitar Hero series to feature drum and microphone controllers for percussion and vocal parts, similar to the competing Rock Band series of games."
 * Does "GHTunes" really need to be italicized?
 * "World Tour received generally positive reviews, citing the" – needs rewording. Seems like World Tour is the one doing the citing.
 * "the existing gameplay" – "the gameplay"
 * "drums or sing" – "drums and sing" – since the ability to do both are introduced
 * "these different instruments" – "these instruments"
 * "common score and scoring multiplier and band performance meter" — "common score, scoring multiplier, and band performance meter"
 * Some terms are in quotes while others aren't, like "Rock Meter" but not "Star Power"? I don't think there are rules as to how they are used, but at least be consistent.
 * "money to be used" – "money that can be used"

Alright, well that's all in the first paragraph of Gameplay. Let me know when that's done; some of the points affect the entire article so I'll wait until these are done before moving forward. Gary King ( talk ) 21:41, 15 December 2008 (UTC)
 * I fixed the above and tried to catch related places in the article where they happened. For quoted terms, I tried to make sure the first use of quotes, introducing the term, was quoted, the other times w/o. --M ASEM  23:21, 15 December 2008 (UTC)


 * "sustain note" – "sustained note"
 * I've played Guitar Hero 3, and this sentence doesn't make sense to me: "The bass guitar player encounters note tracks that include a straight line across the on-screen fret, indicating an open E string, and is played by strumming the controller without hitting any fret buttons."
 * "The drum interface is similar to the guitar," – "The drum interface is similar to the one for the guitar," or "The drum interface is similar to the guitar's interface,"
 * I'm not sure what this means, either: "with each on-screen note track equivalent to a colored drum head on the controller, with the bass drum indicated by a line across the note track."
 * A screenshot showing the instrument note tracks would be useful in this section
 * "in time to the note gems" – after reading a few times I can see what "in time" means here, but perhaps reword it like "at the same time"
 * "helps to build up Star Power. " – "builds up Star Power. "
 * "means in order to" – "means"
 * I just realized that "score multiplier" is not defined, which it probably should be. Either explain it a bit or perhaps remove it. It is mentioned several times.
 * "this done by" – "this is done by"
 * Also, I'd prefer if every paragraph had a reference at the end, just to show that they are all indeed referenced.
 * Okay, that's the second paragraph of Gameplay.

Gary King ( talk ) 00:09, 16 December 2008 (UTC)


 * I've fixed these and tried to work through the rest of the gameplay to make sure of these. On the picture, while it would be nice, it would still end up under the infobox on most screens (as the present picture is now). --M ASEM  16:36, 18 December 2008 (UTC)


 * "the normal four" – "the standard four" – since, are they normal, so they are not weird? But, they are "standard".
 * "and only require any fret button to be held" – doesn't really flow well; the "only" and "any" don't work together. Perhaps something like "and the only requirement is for a fret button to be held" or something

That's the end of the first section of Gameplay. I'm working on another article so I'll move on to "Game modes" later. Gary King ( talk ) 18:55, 18 December 2008 (UTC)


 * Okay, on to "Game modes":


 * "single player" should be "single-player" I believe, per a few things including single-player
 * "The primary game mode for the single player is Career Mode" – "The primary single-player game mode is Career Mode" perhaps
 * " The Career Mode"
 * "several gigs, arranged" – gigs aren't explained prior to this; perhaps say something like "several gigs, which are something, arranged"
 * "arranged in difficulty" – "arranged by difficulty"
 * "instead features featuring" to conform with the previous "removing" in the sentence
 * "a set certain level"
 * "starting a song perfectly" – What does this mean? How do you start the song perfectly? I know you can play a song perfectly, which usually means hit all the notes, but what does starting it mean? You only need to get the first 10% of notes perfect?
 * "The player's total accumulated earnings across"
 * "in the gain game" – I assume
 * ""Battle of the Bands" mode" – "Battle of the Bands mode" – Remove the quotes, considering the game modes haven't been quoted up to here. Speaking of which, determine if "mode" should be capitalized in each case, and make it consistent
 * "performances" – because it's for "both single player and bands", which is plural
 * "as they improvise songs on the fly via"

That's all of "Game modes". Gary King ( talk ) 04:39, 19 December 2008 (UTC)


 * Done. --M ASEM 15:13, 19 December 2008 (UTC)


 * Characters and customization
 * " Users Players are able to use a the"
 * ""Create-a-Rocker" mode which is based on the "Create-a-Skater" mode" – same things here
 * "Players can affect change their character's"
 * Got a better screenshot that shows the "poise, clothing, tattoos, makeup, and age" options at the same time?
 * " starting templates"
 * "Previous games featured"
 * "the player is given the opportunity to can create a fully- customized guitar from various components, such as the body bodies, neck necks, and strum bars"
 * "Activision has created had formed partnerships with several instrument e equipment manufacturers to be featured in the game"
 * "Regal Tip, Sabian cymbals, Vox and Zildjian drumsticks " – if we're just listing company names, that is
 * "In addition to the game and player's own characters" – "In addition to computer- and player-controlled characters"
 * "avatars of famous notable musicians"
 * "either through with motion capture or through the licensing of their image for their character"
 * "real -life arenas"

Done that section, too. Gary King ( talk ) 15:48, 19 December 2008 (UTC)
 * Fixed. Unfortunately, of the available screenshots (and knowing what's in the game), it's difficult to capture all the aspects of character creation in one shot, and from an interface standpoint, is similar to the instrument customization, so NFC is hard to justify here. --M ASEM  16:55, 19 December 2008 (UTC)
 * Okay; can you get to other issues in the article similar to what I pointed out above? I've got a few articles to work on, so I will check back in here a bit. Thanks! Gary King  ( talk ) 17:07, 19 December 2008 (UTC)
 * I've tried to work through this from the above point down and found a few more fixes along these lines. --M ASEM 23:35, 20 December 2008 (UTC)
 * I've made a few minor changes. Otherwise, passing. Gary King  ( talk ) 01:17, 21 December 2008 (UTC)