Talk:Gunay Mammadzada/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: GhostRiver (talk · contribs) 21:52, 25 October 2021 (UTC)

I'll be taking a look at this! —  Ghost River  21:52, 25 October 2021 (UTC)

Infobox and lede

 * "at the European Team Championship in 2019." "at the latter in 2019."
 * Done. Sportsfan77777 (talk) 03:35, 29 October 2021 (UTC)

Early life and background

 * Information about her younger brother should probably be in Personal life
 * Moved. Sportsfan77777 (talk) 03:50, 29 October 2021 (UTC)
 * "Mammadzada began playing chess at five years old. She became interested in the game from watching her grandparents play recreationally." "Mammadzada began playing chess at five years old, having become interested in the game from watching her parents play professionally."
 * Did something like that. Sportsfan77777 (talk) 03:35, 29 October 2021 (UTC)

2009-14

 * FIDE rating through the International Chess Federation (FIDE) Kind of awkward to have the acronym come after its first introduction
 * Moved the introduction of the acronym to the very first sentence of the article instead. Sportsfan77777 (talk) 03:35, 29 October 2021 (UTC)
 * Comma after "higher-rated Russian players"
 * Added a colon. Sportsfan77777 (talk) 03:35, 29 October 2021 (UTC)
 * Comma after "She scored 5/9 at the former event"
 * Done. Sportsfan77777 (talk) 03:35, 29 October 2021 (UTC)
 * Three sentences in a row in the second paragraph begin with 'She"; the middle one can probably be changed to "Mammadzada"
 * Hmm, looks like five in a row. Changed two of them. Sportsfan77777 (talk) 03:35, 29 October 2021 (UTC)
 * Comma after "record by Turkan Mamedyarova"
 * Changed to "surpassing Turkan Mamedyarova's previous record of attaining the title at age 18" Sportsfan77777 (talk) 03:35, 29 October 2021 (UTC)

2015-present

 * "in February" "that February"
 * Done (and "that July"). Sportsfan77777 (talk) 03:35, 29 October 2021 (UTC)
 * "she defeated two Grandmasters in Valentina Gunina who was rated 2509 and Koneru Humpy who was rated 2577." "she defeated two Grandmasters: Valentina Gunina, who was rated 2509, and Koneru Humpy, who was rated 2577."
 * Done. Sportsfan77777 (talk) 03:35, 29 October 2021 (UTC)
 * "in for the last leg" only "in" or "for" should be included
 * Fixed. Sportsfan77777 (talk) 03:35, 29 October 2021 (UTC)
 * Move "despite being the third-lowest rated player out of twelve in the field" to before "She had an excellent result in the round-robin tournament". When I first read it as is, I was confused why she was the third-lowest but had an "excellent" result; reordering will help understand the flow in this way
 * Done, good idea! Sportsfan77777 (talk) 03:35, 29 October 2021 (UTC)

National representation

 * "to finish in fifth place on the second board behind only male players." "to finish in fifth place on the second board, the highest place of any female entrant."
 * I'd rather leave it because I feel like alternate ways to write it don't make it clear that it's just among players on the second board (not all of the players in the whole tournament). Sportsfan77777 (talk) 03:49, 29 October 2021 (UTC)

Playing style

 * "described Mammadzada's strengths as " Gunay has a nice opening knowledge and strong nerves".
 * Done. Sportsfan77777 (talk) 03:35, 29 October 2021 (UTC)

Personal life

 * "Mammadzada's chess idol is Magnus Carlsen, and her other childhood chess idol was Judit Polgár." "Mammadzada's chess idol is Magnus Carlsen, and she has also named Judit Polgár. as an inspiration." (best guess from the machine translation about how to get at the heart of what you're trying to say without repeating "chess idol")
 * Re-worded to "Mammadzada's chess idol is Magnus Carlsen. She had idolized Judit Polgár more at a younger age.". Sportsfan77777 (talk) 03:47, 29 October 2021 (UTC)

General comments

 * All pictures used are CC and relevant
 * No stability concerns in the revision history
 * Earwig score looks great at 2.9%

Putting on hold for now to allow nominator to address comments. Feel free to ping me with questions, and please let me know when you're finished. —  Ghost River  00:47, 26 October 2021 (UTC)


 * Thanks for the review, ! I addressed everything above, agreed with most things. Sportsfan77777 (talk) 03:52, 29 October 2021 (UTC)
 * Re-pinging because I think I messed up the ping the first time. Apologies if you get notified twice. Sportsfan77777 (talk) 03:58, 29 October 2021 (UTC)
 * Thank you for making those changes, passing now! —  Ghost River  01:24, 31 October 2021 (UTC)