Talk:HIStory: Past, Present and Future, Book I/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: – Chase  ( talk ) 19:48, 5 April 2010 (UTC)


 * GA review (see here for criteria)

Hi, Crystal Clear! I believe this is the second article you've nominated that I'll be reviewing. It looks good, now time to check it against the GA criteria.
 * 1) It is reasonably well written.
 * a (prose): b (MoS):
 * Numerous grammatical errors throughout. There are far too many to pinpoint, but just in the lead section:
 * "A majority of the albums tracks" should be "The majority of the album's tracks"
 * "several out of fifteen songs" is awkwardly worded and should be changed to "several of the album's fifteen songs"
 * "The albums songs themes" should be "The song's themes"
 * "Jackson was accused of using anti-Semitism lyrics" should be "Jackson was accused of using antisemitic lyrics"
 * "he did not mean any offense and, on mutiple occasions" the comma should be dropped
 * "one of the albums songs" should be "one of the album's songs"
 * "both of which charted within the top five on Billboard 100" should be dropped to avoid breaking up the listing off of the singles; this can be discussed in the body of the article
 * "HIStory was generally well received by contemporary music critics" "contemporary" should be dropped; the album was released in 1995, of course reviews will be from contemporary critics
 * "HIStorys least charting territory was Italy" should be changed to "HIStory's lowest peak was in Italy"
 * I have reviewed the rest of the article's prose and it contains an even larger amount of issues, which is why I have chosen to not list them all off.
 * 1) It is factually accurate and verifiable.
 * a (references): b (citations to reliable sources):  c (OR):
 * Is rockonthenet.com a reliable source? I'm not familiar with it but it looks rather dubious...
 * 1) It is broad in its coverage.
 * a (major aspects): b (focused):
 * 1) It follows the neutral point of view policy.
 * Fair representation without bias:
 * 1) It is stable.
 * No edit wars, etc.:
 * 1) It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate.
 * a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
 * File:MJ-HIStory.jpg is too large and needs to be reduced to at least 300x300px.
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass/Fail:
 * In all other respects, the article is fine. However, I can't pass this due to the extreme amount of grammatical flaws. I suggest that you request a peer review and renominate this for GA after that. – Chase  ( talk ) 19:48, 5 April 2010 (UTC)
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass/Fail:
 * In all other respects, the article is fine. However, I can't pass this due to the extreme amount of grammatical flaws. I suggest that you request a peer review and renominate this for GA after that. – Chase  ( talk ) 19:48, 5 April 2010 (UTC)