Talk:HMS Gloucester (1654)/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Sturmvogel 66 (talk · contribs) 14:53, 24 November 2022 (UTC)

I'll get to this shortly.--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 14:53, 24 November 2022 (UTC)
 * Images properly licensed
 * The frigate Gloucester (the name of the ship was spelt Glocester by contemporary sources)[13] Speaker-class third rate, and the first British naval vessel ship to be named after the English city of Gloucester. missing a verb?
 * Sorted. AM


 * The service history table seems rather redundant to the text.
 * Agreed, now deleted. AM


 * Link Commonwealth Protector
 * Sorted. AM


 * After a Dutch fleet, commanded by Jacob van Wassenaer Obdam, defeated the Swedes in the Battle of the Sound, and lifted the blockade of Copenhagen.[27] the Commonwealth Protector I think that this needs a comma rather than a period
 * Sorted.


 * Gotta run, more later.--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 15:23, 27 November 2022 (UTC)
 * Above comments addressed. Amitchell125 (talk) 09:42, 29 November 2022 (UTC)


 * de-link frigate and third rate in the Construction para
 * Done. AM


 * Rammed by who?
 * Winfield doesn't give details, and I haven't found anything else about the incident. Amitchell125 (talk) 17:19, 29 November 2022 (UTC)
 * Nothing in accounts of the battle? If so, then I'd suggest deleting that bit because it raises questions about an incident that didn't seem to matter.--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 19:53, 29 November 2022 (UTC)
 * Done. Amitchell125 (talk) 09:20, 2 December 2022 (UTC)


 * The English fleet of 100 ships included 64 men-of-war and 24 merchant ships, but overall greatly superior in firepower. missing a verb?
 * Sentence amended. AM


 * During the battle the individual English squadrons soon got out of line, but not with each other. Does this actually matter?
 * No, it's a minor detail, now cut. AM


 * By the end of the battle, the English had captured or sank sunk
 * Done. AM


 * A day after his arrival, Clark intercepted a Dutch flotilla of 12 ships en route from the Baltic to Amsterdam was intercepted, and seven of the ships were captured. ??
 * Sorted. AM


 * The English fleet was manoeuvred east of the Kentish Knock on 1 June to reach the Dutch fleet.[35] The fleets fought off North Foreland. Combine these
 * Done. AM


 * Move the link for the Duke of Albemarle to the first use
 * Done.


 * The following day, the English attacked the Dutch, but the Duke of Albemarle was forced onto the defensive, the situation saved the following day when Prince Rupert's ships reappeared. awkward, another missing verb (noticing a pattern here?) and proximity alert for "following day". Twice in one sentence is once too often.
 * Sorted. AM


 * Readers aren't going to care about ships captured from the Dutch and then recaptured by them; they're going to want to know how many RN ships were lost.
 * Agreed, sentence amended. AM


 * Link for Gunfleet?
 * Not found. Perhaps a red link? Amitchell125 (talk) 17:41, 29 November 2022 (UTC)
 * That would work.--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 19:53, 29 November 2022 (UTC)
 * Done. AM


 * Casualties seem light for being totally disabled. How was the ship disabled? Dismasted, rudder shot off, what?
 * I've been unable to find further details. AM


 * More later. Read through the rest of your prose and fix the missing "was" in your sentences.--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 16:18, 29 November 2022 (UTC)
 * Prose issues looked at. AM

Hi, I think all the comments in your review so far have now been addressed. Amitchell125 (talk) 19:04, 30 November 2022 (UTC)
 * Link Smyrna, second lieutenant
 * Coleman or Colman? When did he take command?
 * Gloucester was a large asset for the Royal Navy large? perhaps "valuable"
 * There's no article for Graham, but link to his title. Which, BTW, is spelled Marquess.
 * Add the exact date of her loss to the infobox.--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 00:47, 1 December 2022 (UTC)
 * All done. Amitchell125 (talk) 09:19, 1 December 2022 (UTC)