Talk:HMS Gloucester (1909)/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Cwmhiraeth (talk · contribs) 05:28, 30 August 2016 (UTC)


 * I propose to review this article. Cwmhiraeth (talk) 05:28, 30 August 2016 (UTC)

First reading

 * In general, this is a well-written article about a ship which took part in quite a limited range of actions.
 * In general, it does not make clear who was in command of the vessel.
 * My sources usually don't tell me who was in command.
 * Where does the information in the info box come from?
 * It's all sourced in the description section.
 * You could mention the compliment of crew in the main body of text.
 * Doh!, done.
 * "The Bristol sub-class[Note 1] was rated as second-class cruisers" - were rather than was.
 * BritEng handling of collective nouns always throws me.
 * "This armament was considered rather too light for ships of this size" - by whom?
 * Added.
 * "As the protective deck was at the waterline, the ships were given a large metacentric height so that they would remain stable in the event of flooding above the armoured deck." - this sentence mixes singular and plural.
 * Yes, that's deliberate. The design elements are singular while reference to the ships keeps things from getting monotonous.
 * The last sentence in the "Design and description" section needs extra punctuation.
 * See if it reads better now.
 * "As tensions role with Germany in the first few days of August 1914" - Typo.
 * "Therefore, Milne stationed the battlecruiser Inflexible and Indefatigable ..." - This sentence is too long and convoluted.
 * Indeed, see how it reads now.
 * You do not mention who was in command of Gloucester in 1914.
 * Umm, Kelly is mentioned in command during the pursuit of Goeben, which is August 1914.
 * "... landing 100 Royal Marines." - Do you mean that Gloucester went to Galway in order to land the marines?
 * It seems so, although I don't have detailed enough info to specifically state that.
 * You mention Beatty at the Battle of Jutland, but you do not state who he was.
 * Good catch.
 * That's all for now. Cwmhiraeth (talk) 06:00, 31 August 2016 (UTC)
 * Thanks for reviewing this.--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 16:00, 31 August 2016 (UTC)

I am happy with the changes made and think this article meets the GA criteria. Cwmhiraeth (talk) 19:44, 31 August 2016 (UTC)