Talk:HMS Larne (1910)/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Pickersgill-Cunliffe (talk · contribs) 20:30, 11 August 2022 (UTC)

Will take a look at this shortly. Pickersgill-Cunliffe (talk) 20:30, 11 August 2022 (UTC)

Prelim

 * No edit wars
 * Image licensed correctly
 * Duplicated links: anti-submarine warfare, 2nd Destroyer Flotilla, Irish Sea
 * Removed.
 * Earwig reports copyvio unlikely

Lede and infobox

 * Looks like some of the same hyphen issues as with Sheldrake, e.g. the first "Acorn class" should have one
 * Nice spot. Template parameter changed.
 * "Larne was participated in exercises" needs a rejig
 * Grammar fixed.
 * "sustaining damage due to fast running and a naval demonstration" you could reword this, it currently reads like she sustained a naval demonstration!
 * I have reworded it.
 * Infobox says laid down 8 December, article says 5 December
 * Oops. Good spot.
 * The general characteristics heading has a random curly bracket
 * Removed

Design and description

 * Full load doesn't have a short tons conversion
 * Added.
 * Link horsepower
 * Added.
 * Ibid knots
 * Added.
 * Be regular with your abbreviations; you've got two "knots" followed by a "kn", for example
 * Fixed. It should be first instance full and all the others abbreviated, as per MOS:1STOCC.

Construction and career

 * You provided the yard number for Sheldrake, was this not possible for Larne?
 * I wish I could. Unfortunately I don't have access to Lyon's unpublished Thornycroft List which I believe would provide this.
 * "sourced from" is slightly strange wording, suggest "ordered" or similar
 * I was trying to avoid repeating "order" as it was in the previous sentence, but obviously clumsily. Amended.
 * Our SIA has Larne as the third ship of that name rather than the fourth
 * Fixed.
 * "named after the town of Larne"?
 * Added.
 * "this time did" doesn't seem to make sense in context, suggest removing
 * Removed.
 * Link bunkers
 * Linked.
 * Not sure the lone "Flotilla" should be capitalised
 * Happy to change it to lower case.
 * "evidence of their operation" not sure how relevant this might be to the article, but what evidence might one exactly find from a surface ship of submarine operations?! It would however be useful to note whether this was the end of their Hebridean trip
 * The source does not say, unfortunately.
 * Was Conqueror still "damaged" at this point? After reading our GA on her I assume the destroyers were escorting the now not-damaged battleship back to the fleet?
 * Clarified.
 * "only destroyer from the division to manage the whole journey" why?
 * Added the fates of the other ships.
 * "Lame" a freudian slip?!
 * Possibly. Fixed.
 * Why was she being recommissioned, and how long was she out of service beforehand?
 * The sources do not say, or why recommissioning was necessary.
 * "escorting ships" stipulate what kind?
 * Added.
 * I assume U-20 was on the surface to be shot at, but you might want to make it clear if that was so
 * The source does not say, but it is reasonable to assume so.
 * "all merchant sailing"?
 * Added.
 * "The alternative was to lose ships" really? this sounds unusually definite; would "to ensure ships were not sunk there" or similar work?
 * Amended for clarity.
 * "During 1917" is a more specific date available?
 * Unfortunately not in the sources I have.