Talk:HMS Levant (1758)/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Sturmvogel 66 (talk · contribs) 15:39, 31 August 2016 (UTC)

I'll get to this shortly.--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 15:39, 31 August 2016 (UTC)

Sorry for the delay.
 * No DABs and external links look good although the newspaper links are blocked because I don't have access.
 * Images properly licensed.
 * First two paras in the lede could be profitably be combined. One sentence paragraphs are not a good way to go.
 * enemy-controlled vessels reads awkwardly. If they were all French then say so.
 * Link on first use: launched, Caribbean station, decommissioned, Gibraltar, privateer, shipwright, keel, beam, hold, Dominica, brandy, broken up
 * forming a battery that could be fired directly forward use the term "chase guns" with a link and rework the sentence appropriately.
 * enemy craft the leading pair comma after "craft"
 * Her crewing complement was 200 officers and men Use either crew or complement and use the British term ratings rather than "men".
 * carry the General aboard Do not capitalize the rank here since it's not a proper noun. And the same here promoted to Admiral in 1794
 * when in company with Captain Rich's Enterprise she set off the subordinate clause with commas after "when" and "Enterprise"
 * for breaking up try "to be broken up" instead.


 * No problems re delay, and thanks for the review. The above points are now ✅, and happy to make any further improvements if you come across more. -- Euryalus (talk) 04:40, 9 October 2016 (UTC)